批改作文 剑七 test2 task2Nowadays,a hot and important contraversy concerning the problem whether the punishments for each type of crimes should be fixed.Some people contend that the consistent punishments seems to be fairer and more clearly.whi

批改作文 剑七 test2 task2Nowadays,a hot and important contraversy concerning the problem whether the punishments for each type of crimes should be fixed.Some people contend that the consistent punishments seems to be fairer and more clearly.whi
批改作文 剑七 test2 task2
Nowadays,a hot and important contraversy concerning the problem whether the punishments for each type of crimes should be fixed.Some people contend that the consistent punishments seems to be fairer and more clearly.while a large amount proporation of people advocate that it depends on individual situation.I will present and analyde both views here.
The first plain truth Iwant to emphasize here is that every crimes has its own reasons and resutls,it can not be divided simplity from one aspect.So that the decision which considered different circumstance turns to be positive reasonable. Furthermore, with the complicate motivation and action,there has not a boundry line between two similiar commitment in current days.The flxible punishment system will not fail to be one good way to show the society that the government care about them,and thus ,the general public are able to participate more in government policy determination.Last but not least,the sdandadization of law has been improved rapidly in these years.Even two crimes lead to the same result,one's original intension to commite should be taking account to replect the regular law setup.
Admittedly,fixed punishments have some merits.Under the fixed punishment system,the law enforcement officials have definite rules to follow.The crimes will make up some excuses for themslves to get the jury's simpathy,and escape from the judgment they due to get. But with the developed law system,this problem can be solved efficiently.
In conclusion,altough fixed punishment policy has deniable advantages,I regard the flexible system as a better choice.It is the best way for us to get a clear perspevtive of what teh crimes got relied on what they have done.with such a perspective,we can own a more peaceful society.

批改作文 剑七 test2 task2Nowadays,a hot and important contraversy concerning the problem whether the punishments for each type of crimes should be fixed.Some people contend that the consistent punishments seems to be fairer and more clearly.whi
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1 Nowadays,a hot and important contraversy /controversy concerning the problem whether the punishments for each type of crimes should be fixed.全句没有谓语,而且whether 后面也不是句子.这种错误一定要避免.可以在important后面加 is.Whether 后面可改成：whether punishments for each type of crime should be fixed
2 Some people contend that the consistent punishments seems to be fairer and more clearly/clear.while a large amount proporation/去掉 of people advocate that it depends on individual situation.I will present and analyde both views here.
取其把题目几乎不做改动的抄一遍,可以选择其他的开篇方式,people have various opinions concerning whether punishments for each type of crime should be fixed.As for me,+ 观点
3 The first plain truth I want to emphasize here is that every crimes/crime has its own reasons and results/不相关,去掉,it can not be divided/judged simplity/simply from one aspect.So that the decision which considered/consider different circumstance turns to be positive reasonable.论证有些浅,可以深度解释,也可举例,否则就成了喊口考了Furthermore,with the complicate motivation and action,there has/is not a boundry/boundary line/去掉 between two similar commitment in current days.The flexible punishment system will not fail to be one good way to show the society that the government care about them,and thus ,the general public are able to participate more in government policy determination/policy-making.Last but not least,the sdandadization of law has been improved rapidly in these years.Even two crimes lead to the same result,one's original intension to commite should be taking account /should be taken into account to replect/replace the regular law setup.
4 Admittedly,fixed punishments have some merits.Under the fixed punishment system,the law enforcement officials have definite rules to follow.The crimes will make up some excuses for themselves to get/gain the jury's simpathy/sympathy ,and escape from the judgment they due to/are due to receive.But with the developed law system,this problem can be solved efficiently.跑题了
这一段有一半是跑题的,要谈固定刑罚的理由,而不是如果避免法庭上不公平
5 In conclusion,altough/although fixed punishment policy has deniable/undeniable advantages,I regard the flexible system as a better choice.It is the best way for us to get a clear perspevtive/perspective of what teh/the crimes got/what type of punishment law offenders should get relied on/according to their crimes what they have done/去掉.with such a perspective,we can own a more peaceful society.
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