作文改错,速度!有分加.Hi, my name is XXX. I have been living in XXX for two years. To pursue my goal, which is to finish my accountant dream, I came to XXX to start my first step. XXX is the first college I take in this country, and I study

作文改错,速度!有分加.Hi, my name is XXX. I have been living in XXX for two years. To pursue my goal, which is to finish my accountant dream, I came to XXX to start my first step. XXX is the first college I take in this country, and I study
作文改错,速度!有分加.
Hi, my name is XXX. I have been living in XXX for two years. To pursue my goal, which is to finish my accountant dream, I came to XXX to start my first step. XXX is the first college I take in this country, and I study accounting in here. Few days ago, I heard that our college had a scholarship for the students who were motivated in college. After checking the requirement of the applications, I think I meet the requirement for applying this scholarship. For that reason, I am writing to you in the hope of obtaining the scholarship for the next academic year.
There are several reasons help you to consider my application. First, everyone who wants to apply this scholarship should meet the basic requirement of academic standard. I believe myself that I can get excellent GPA because I always work very hard and patient to do the assignment. In addition, I always ask professors about the problems that not understand. Another reason is that I will try to apply for the work study to enrich my life. It's an effective way to improve my academic and social knowledge. On the other hand, our college has many excellent students; however, I feel self-confident to compete with others. I hope I’m excellent enough for you to grant the scholarship.
Also, I will describe specific about using these money if I can receive our college’s scholarship. First, if I received the scholarship, I will purchase more materials to help my studying. These major books can help me absorb academic knowledge effectively, such as some new business dictionaries and textbooks. If I have extra money, I will consider spending this money to buy a business computer to help with my major studying.
At last, I hope you can understand why I’m eligible for this scholarship and the ways to spend this scholarship. I would appreciate it very much if you would grant the scholarship. Thank you for reading and considering my application.

作文改错,速度!有分加.Hi, my name is XXX. I have been living in XXX for two years. To pursue my goal, which is to finish my accountant dream, I came to XXX to start my first step. XXX is the first college I take in this country, and I study
Hi,my name is XXX.I have been living in XXX for two years.To pursue my goal,which is to achieve my dream of becoming an accountant,I faithfully selected XXX as the place where my first step would take place.XXX is the first college attracted my interest in this country,and I study accounting in here.Few days ago,I heard that our college had a scholarship for the students who were motivated in college.After checking the requirement of the applications,I suppose that I have met the requirement of applying this scholarship.For that reason,I am writing to you in the hope of obtaining the scholarship for the next academic year.
There are several reasons which you should consider my application.First,everyone who wants to apply for this scholarship should have met the basic requirement of academic standard.I believe myself that I can get excellent GPA because of my hard working and patience of doing the assignments.In addition,I always ask professors about the problems that I did not fully understand.Another reason is that I will try to apply for the work study to enrich my life.It's an effective way to improve my academic and social knowledge.On the other hand,our college has many excellent students; however,I feel self-confident to compete with others.I hope I’m excellent enough for you to grant the scholarship.
Also,I will describe specifically about use of these money if I can receive our college’s scholarship.First,if I received the scholarship,I will purchase more materials to help my studying.These major books can help me to absorb academic knowledge more effectively,such as some new business dictionaries and textbooks.If I have extra money,I will consider spending this amount of money to purchase a business computer to help with my major studying.
Last but not least,I hope you could understand why I am eligible for this scholarship and the ways to spend this scholarship.I would appreciate it very much if you would grant the scholarship.Thank you for reading and considering my application.
我只是简单的修改了一下,studying overseas could be somewhat uneasy for you as you have to do part time jobs for your own livings.Just like myself,I am currently studying in Singapore.Good luck to your application of scholarship.

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