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Intro
The main idea of ‘’In the memoryhouse’’ is a girl’s happiness with themusic box that her father just gave to her,when her mom told her that hermusic box is broke,she feel lose something very important,so she cry ,shesad,because she loses the precious thing that’ maybe is the only one in theworld.When you lose something important,how do you feel?We need to think about what most importantthing in the life and cherish what you have now.
我的这一段想讲的内容是 THESIS STATEMENT 是
得到的东西得来不易 需要好好珍惜眼前的东西
一旦珍贵的东西失去了 会後悔莫及
失去了才会懂得珍惜
Body paragraph# 1
What’s the happiness in the world?What’sthe sadness in the world?
The happiness in the world is that you gotsomething special from the family,friend or lover,and there is some specialmeaning for you.The sadness in the world is you lose your precious things andthat could be the only one in the world,you cannot found the same one inanother place.The author used the symbolism to…作者使用了象徵来叙述故事我认为故事中的音乐盒意义重大可以代表一个纯真的心也可以代表父亲的爱当故事中的小女孩失去了她珍爱的音乐盒她是非常悲痛无法接受的因为她失去了她父亲给她的爱也失去了单纯的心直到後来才在垃圾堆中找到虽然已经碎裂的音乐盒她才有了最後的希望代表著她还是找到并没有失去父亲的爱和一颗单纯的心
Body paragraph#2
Never know what’s the real and what’s thefake in the world.The hard thing is to protect the things that you wish toprotect.It’s easily to get something,but more easily to get lose somethingimportant too.In the story,the author used the characterization 作者硕造的人物描述非常特别和令人印象深刻 在故事中 小女孩 Bekey 尝试著学习法语 因为她爸爸在巴黎工作 讲法语 她想用法语和她爸爸沟通在这一点可看出她非常爱她爸爸肯为了她爸爸努力.当她爸爸回来给她带来了礼物 一个漂亮的音乐盒 她是非常高兴 兴奋的 因为这个音乐盒是她爸爸给她特地从巴黎带回的礼物所以她很珍惜爱护这个音乐盒因为太高兴太喜欢这个音乐盒了所以当隔天她母亲告诉她说她的音乐盒已经坏了碎了她整个受到打击难过的无法接受事实和上学
我认为作者硕造的故事中的脚色母亲是有点不负责任的 如果她可以让她女儿自己保管她的音乐盒 我想悲剧可能不会发生
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The main idea of ‘’In the memory house’’ is a girl’s happiness with the music box that her father just gave to her, when her mom told her that her music box is broken, she felt like she lost something very important, so she cries and she's sad, because she lost the precious thing that could be the only one in theworld. When you lose something important, how do you feel? We need to think about what the most important thing in life is and cherish what you have now.
Thesis statement
It's not easy to get anything in life, once you get it, you should cherish it. Once you lose the important thing, you will regret it very much. Once one loses something, they finally learn to cherish.
What’s happiness in this world? What’s sadness in this world?
The happiness in the world is that you have something special from your family, friend or lover, and there is something with special meaning for you. The sadness in the world is that you lose your precious things and that could be the one and only in this world, you cannot find the same one in another place. The author used symbolism to tell this story. I think the music box in this story has deep meanings. It symbolizes a pure heart and also symbolizes a father's love toward his daughter. When the little girl lost her music box she's very sad and won't accept the fact because she lost her father's love and her pure heart. Until she finally finds the music box in a pile of trash broken but it didn't matter to her because she knows she still has her father's love and her heart.
One Never knows what's real and what’s fake in the world. The hard thing is to protect the things that you wish to protect. It’s easy to get something, but more easily to get lose something important too. In the story, the author used special and unforgettable characterization. In the story, Beke tries to learn French because her dad works in Paris speaking French. She wants to communicate with her dad in French, from this, we can tell she loves her dad very much and is willing to work hard for her dad. When her dad came back and brought her a pretty music box, she was very, very excited because her dad especially brought her this from Paris and she loves it very much. But because she loved it so much, the next day when her mom told her that her music box was broken, she couldn't accept it and was heart broken
问题补充： I think the mom character in this story is a little non- responsible. If she let her daughter keep the music box, I don't think any of this would have happened
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