please corrot and enrich itI was glad that I frist opened the blog to communicate with all people and use english expessing my ideas.What is more,In internet many strange friends help me revise my article so that I belived I could improve my english

please corrot and enrich itI was glad that I frist opened the blog to communicate with all people and use english expessing my ideas.What is more,In internet many strange friends help me revise my article so that I belived I could improve my english
please corrot and enrich it
I was glad that I frist opened the blog to communicate with all people and use english expessing my ideas.What is more,In internet many strange friends help me revise my article so that I belived I could improve my english levels quickly.This afternoon,I purchased the book on social psychology,writen by David.It is very difficult for meto read it because I always come across so many new words that I had to look up the ditionary all the time.He was very overawed by his great knowledge.In his article,he analysed the current events and caused to my thinkings for example:After 9/11,most peaple fear flying more than driving,and many will drive great distances to avoid risking the skiers.Actually,we're about three dozen times safer in a commerial plane than in a motor vehicle.Although I took two hours to read 4 pages,yet I insisted on reading it.

please corrot and enrich itI was glad that I frist opened the blog to communicate with all people and use english expessing my ideas.What is more,In internet many strange friends help me revise my article so that I belived I could improve my english
I was（am） glad that I frist opened the blog(it's my first blog with which I'm going) to communicate with all(去掉all) people and use english expessing my ideas(把and-ideas的内容换成"in English").What is more,In(on the) internet(Internet) many strange(去掉) friends help me revise my article（s） so that I belived(believe that) I could improve my english(English) levels(去掉) quickly.This afternoon,I purchased the（a） book on social psychology,writen by David.It is very difficult for me to read it because I always come across so many new words that I had to look up the ditionary all the time.He was very overawed by his great knowledge.In his article,he analysed the current events and caused to(去掉) my thinkings for example:After 9/11,most peaple fear flying more than driving,and many will drive great distances to avoid risking the skiers.Actually,we're about three dozen times safer in a commerial plane than in a motor vehicle.Although I took two hours to read 4 pages,yet I insisted on reading it.

expessing－－to express
In internet ---on internet
strange friends help --strange friends may help 是不是更好呢
so that I belived ---去掉i believed
english levels --English level
for meto ...

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expessing－－to express
In internet ---on internet
strange friends help --strange friends may help 是不是更好呢
so that I belived ---去掉i believed
english levels --English level
for meto read it ——去掉it
look up the ditionary－－look up in the ditionary
caused to my thinkings －－我觉得stimulate更好
most peaple fear flying ---most peaple are in fear (of) flying
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