大家帮我看看这篇文章有没问题了?A Dangerous KillerWe can meet smokers everywhere:at home、in public places and even at school.The population of our earth is 5,800,000,000,and the number of somkers is 1,100,000,000,nearly take 20 percen

大家帮我看看这篇文章有没问题了?A Dangerous KillerWe can meet smokers everywhere:at home、in public places and even at school.The population of our earth is 5,800,000,000,and the number of somkers is 1,100,000,000,nearly take 20 percen
大家帮我看看这篇文章有没问题了?
A Dangerous Killer
We can meet smokers everywhere:at home、in public places and even at school.The population of our earth is 5,800,000,000,and the number of somkers is 1,100,000,000,nearly take 20 percent of the total.Smoking is very harmful.It takes 2,000,000,000,000 dollars and 3,000,000 lives every year.Luckily,people have come to realize the great harm.In 1990,there was 14,3 00,000,000 pounds of tobacoo in the world,and in 1990,the number was reduced to 7 ,000,000,000 pounds.So let’s tell you familiar smokers,smoking is a dangerous killer!Then our air will be more clean,our world will be more beautiful.

大家帮我看看这篇文章有没问题了?A Dangerous KillerWe can meet smokers everywhere:at home、in public places and even at school.The population of our earth is 5,800,000,000,and the number of somkers is 1,100,000,000,nearly take 20 percen
楼主为什么问两遍同样D问题呀~
两个错误~
1.In 1990,there was 14,3 00,000,000 pounds of tobacoo in the world,and in 1990,
是不是打错了~都是1990?
2.Then our air will be more clean,our world will be more beautiful.
clean的比较级是cleaner~不需要more的哦~

一分悬赏也没有，除非是非常好的好心人，否则没人理你
知道不？
the number of somkers is 1,100,000,000, nearly take 20 percent of the total。
此处错误，后面的分句没有主语，应在nearly的前面加上which

So let’s tell your familiar smokers, smoking is a dangerous killer! 一句结论很突然,如果再列举一些吸烟会引起的致命疾病就要好多了.

So let’s tell your familiar smokers, smoking is a dangerous killer! 一句结论很突然,如果再列举一些吸烟会引起的致命疾病就要好多了.

1.The population of world is 5.8 billion, and the smoking population is 1.1 billion, which nearly takes 20 percent of the total.
familiar smokers??
2.So please tell the smokers around you tha...

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1.The population of world is 5.8 billion, and the smoking population is 1.1 billion, which nearly takes 20 percent of the total.
familiar smokers??
2.So please tell the smokers around you that smoking can kill. If there are less smokers in this world, the pollution would be less which makes the air clearer and our environment more livable.

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