求大神我改篇英语作文In my childhood,the most important thing to me is my cousin,he knows how to share and be tolerant of people,because of this he in my childhood has left a deep impression In my childhood,my cousin always influence charact

求大神我改篇英语作文In my childhood,the most important thing to me is my cousin,he knows how to share and be tolerant of people,because of this he in my childhood has left a deep impression In my childhood,my cousin always influence charact
求大神我改篇英语作文
In my childhood,the most important thing to me is my cousin,he knows how to share and be tolerant of people,because of this he in my childhood has left a deep impression In my childhood,my cousin always influence character by environment's taught me a lot and still let me benefit.Because of my church several years older than I am,he always can be in many ways and I sometimes will take the initiative to me,this let me good habit from childhood learned humility.Not only that in childhood Chudo brother also taught me how to help and support oneself,what I have felt admire habit cousin in childhood and know how to use,that is why the cousin is the most important person in my childhood.
One thing cuz I admired that once I want to eat ice cream but no money,my cousin told me there is a grass mowing can be sold for money we can sell and buy ice cream.So we have to work but I soon tired,do not want to do and then give up,but my cousin has been trying to mow grass can buy ice cream until the exercise date,the last cousin gave me an ice cream.I asked him:"why so hard." "No pains,No gains "

求大神我改篇英语作文In my childhood,the most important thing to me is my cousin,he knows how to share and be tolerant of people,because of this he in my childhood has left a deep impression In my childhood,my cousin always influence charact
在我的童年,我最重要的事情是我的表弟,他知道如何分享和宽容的人,因此他在我的童年已在我的童年留下了深刻的印象,我表妹总是由环境影响特征
；的教会我很多,也让我受益.因为比我大几岁的我的教会,他总是会在很多方面和我有时会主动给我,这让我从小就学会了谦卑的好习惯.不仅在童年中堂兄弟还教我如何帮助和支持自己,什么我都觉得欣赏习惯的表弟在童年和知道如何使用,这就是为什么表姐是我童年最重要的人.
一件事,因为我欣赏这一次我想吃冰淇淋,但没钱了,我的表弟告诉我有一个割草可以卖的钱我们能买和卖冰淇淋.所以我们有工作,但我很快就累了,不想做就放弃,但我的表哥一直试图割草可以行使日期之前买冰淇淋,最后的表姐给了我一个冰淇淋.我问他：“为什么这么难.没有痛苦,就没有收获”；

In my childhood, the most important thing to me is my cousin, he knows how to share and be tolerant of people, because of this he in my childhood has left a deep impression In my childhood, my cousin ...

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In my childhood, the most important thing to me is my cousin, he knows how to share and be tolerant of people, because of this he in my childhood has left a deep impression In my childhood, my cousin always influence character by environment's taught me a lot and still let me benefit. Because of my church several years older than I am, he always can be in many ways and I sometimes will take the initiative to me, this let me good habit from childhood learned humility. Not only that in childhood Chudo brother also taught me how to help and support oneself, what I have felt admire habit cousin in childhood and know how to use, that is why the cousin is the most important person in my childhood.
在我的童年，我最重要的事情是我的表弟，他知道如何分享和宽容的人，因此他在我的童年已在我的童年留下了深刻的印象，我表妹总是由环境的影响特征教会我很多，也让我受益。因为比我大几岁的我的教会，他总是会在很多方面和我有时会主动给我，这让我从小就学会了谦卑的好习惯。不仅在童年中堂兄弟还教我如何帮助和支持自己，什么我都觉得欣赏习惯的表弟在童年和知道如何使用，这就是为什么表姐是我童年最重要的人。
One thing cuz I admired that once I want to eat ice cream but no money, my cousin told me there is a grass mowing can be sold for money we can sell and buy ice cream. So we have to work but I soon tired, do not want to do and then give up, but my cousin has been trying to mow grass can buy ice cream until the exercise date, the last cousin gave me an ice cream. I asked him: "why so hard. " "No pains, No gains "
一件事，因为我欣赏这一次我想吃冰淇淋，但没钱了，我的表弟告诉我有一个割草可以卖的钱我们能买和卖冰淇淋。所以我们有工作，但我很快就累了，不想做就放弃，但我的表哥一直试图割草可以行使日期之前买冰淇淋，最后的表姐给了我一个冰淇淋。我问他：“为什么这么难。”没有付出就没有收获。
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1、the most important thing:thing→person
2、 he knows how to →跟前面那句分开，句子逗号无连词是错的。
3、because of +词组，而不是句子。而且这句话句子读不通。
4、my cousin always makes influence on...
...

不好意思，改不下去了，语病...

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1、the most important thing:thing→person
2、 he knows how to →跟前面那句分开，句子逗号无连词是错的。
3、because of +词组，而不是句子。而且这句话句子读不通。
4、my cousin always makes influence on...
...

不好意思，改不下去了，语病实在太多，真的建议你重写。多问一句，你几岁啊？

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