作业帮我写了一篇英语作文,若按中考18分评分的话,可以得几分?还有,帮我修改一下全文好吗?My Family RulesAs we all know,a nation has it's rule and a family also has one.In my home,I have a lot of rules.For example,playing the pi
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我写了一篇英语作文,若按中考18分评分的话,可以得几分?还有,帮我修改一下全文好吗?My Family RulesAs we all know,a nation has it's rule and a family also has one.In my home,I have a lot of rules.For example,playing the pi
我写了一篇英语作文,若按中考18分评分的话,可以得几分?还有,帮我修改一下全文好吗?
My Family Rules
As we all know,a nation has it's rule and a family also has one.In my home,I have a lot of rules.For example,playing the piano everday,do the home work more than2 hours.So I get tired of the family rules.I want to tell my parents some suggestions.If you would like me to be a good boy,you needn't give me a lot of rules and I'll do myself.Because I'm growing up.
我写了一篇英语作文,若按中考18分评分的话,可以得几分?还有,帮我修改一下全文好吗?My Family RulesAs we all know,a nation has it's rule and a family also has one.In my home,I have a lot of rules.For example,playing the pi
如果中考按18分算的话,本篇短文的得分12分.原因在于：
1.字数太少,只有79个
2.用词不当：如in my home（应该改为：in my family; some suggestions是复数形式,然而内容方面只有一点；而且suggestion用在这里不太合适应该为my opinion）
3.文中错误：it's应该为its； do 应该为doingthe home work more than2 hours,而且本句表达不符合英语习惯； everday应该为every day
4.语言表达不够美
My Family Rules
As we all know, a nation has its rule and so does a family. In my home, I have a lot of rules.Such as, playing the piano every day, spending more than 2 hours doing the homework ,which really make me feel tired. After all, we students should be allowed to do what they like to sometimes. I want to tell my parents my opinion. If you would like me to be a good boy, it's better not to give me so many rules and I'll do it myself. Because I'm growing up.