我的六级习作片段写的如何?The warm blood splashed upon her face,Jiemei regretted for giving her son such a servere punch .However,as she found her breast exploded a large skin,and her son’s crotch stuck up straightly,she recalled somethi

我的六级习作片段写的如何?The warm blood splashed upon her face,Jiemei regretted for giving her son such a servere punch .However,as she found her breast exploded a large skin,and her son’s crotch stuck up straightly,she recalled somethi
我的六级习作片段写的如何?
The warm blood splashed upon her face,Jiemei regretted for giving her son such a servere punch .However,as she found her breast exploded a large skin,and her son’s crotch stuck up straightly,she recalled something rubbing along her thighs over the passionate time.she couldn’t constrain the wrath inward,covering up the boobs and picked up a branch,lashed on her son’s back regardless of his inside wound.
“you beast,how could I give a birth to you beast,what did you do to me just before?I am your biological mother who bore and reared you,how could you do such things to your mum?
The whiplash was falling down upon the teen body like the pouring.Jiemei cried:” where is the virtue you once had?Your father was slain by the foes of your family,you haven’t avenged him but revolted ,doing this to your mother,are you a human being?”
外国人都说我写的好呢？他说我写的东西让他抓狂，看来我写的还是很生动的

我的六级习作片段写的如何?The warm blood splashed upon her face,Jiemei regretted for giving her son such a servere punch .However,as she found her breast exploded a large skin,and her son’s crotch stuck up straightly,she recalled somethi
第一句断成两句比较好,现在是个run-on sentence
severe拼错了
之后的就看不下去了,语法也不通顺,这是俄狄浦斯王吗?