帮我看下这篇英语短文写的对不对During the war,the price of oil was soaring.I go to school by car every day,so my family has to spend more money for the car.And the soaring prices of the oil also cause all the price of commodity mark up.

帮我看下这篇英语短文写的对不对During the war,the price of oil was soaring.I go to school by car every day,so my family has to spend more money for the car.And the soaring prices of the oil also cause all the price of commodity mark up.
帮我看下这篇英语短文写的对不对
During the war,the price of oil was soaring.I go to school by car every day,so my family has to spend more money for the car.And the soaring prices of the oil also cause all the price of commodity mark up.Because the entire commodity need transportation,if the price of the oil was soaring that the cost of the transportation will be increase in price too.So all the price of commodity was soaring.And that cause people didn’t buy a lot of thing,because they were expensive,and this may cause 通货膨胀.Because of 通货膨胀,people’s salary become lower and lower and some of them may lose their job,some company closed down.And at that time,my family was a little bit short of money; because the entire commodity was expensive then my life is uncomfortable.Unlike before .
But there’s still have something good happened.Because of the soaring precise of the oil,there wasn’t a lot of car.And the environment became better and better.The pollution became smaller and smaller,there wasn’t that much CO2,(the global warming may won’t be that serious*this is my own opinion,maybe this is wrong *)
通货膨胀啥的= = 用英语不会写

帮我看下这篇英语短文写的对不对During the war,the price of oil was soaring.I go to school by car every day,so my family has to spend more money for the car.And the soaring prices of the oil also cause all the price of commodity mark up.
During the war, the price of oil soared. I went to school by car every day, so my family had to spend more money for the car. The soaring prices of the oil also cause all the prices of commodities to go up, and because transportation of commodities was required, the rise of cost of oil will also result in increase in transportation fees. Therefore all the price of commodities were soaring. And that caused the people to be unable to afford too much things as they were expensive, and this may cause inflation. Because of inflation,people's salaries become lower and lower and unemployment may also occur as some companies may close down. And at that time, my family was short of money; because the commodities were expensive and my life was uncomfortable unlike before .
But something good still happened. Because of the soaring price of the oil, there weren't many cars, thus the environment became better. Pollution became lesser of a problem, there wasn’t that much CO2, (the global warming may won’t be that serious*this is my own opinion, this could be wrong*)