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篇一：TEM4作文评分标准

PART VIWRITING [45MIN] SECTION ACOMPOSITION[35MIN]

Most of us, as students, are careful with our money in daily life: we collect all kinds of coupons (优惠劵)； we look for group-buy deals if we eat out or travel; we don’t buy clothes unless in a sale. However, some people think that all this may not make smart consumers. What is your opinion?

Write on ANSWER SHEET THREE a composition of about 200 words.

You are to write in three parts.

In the first part, state specifically what your opinion is;

In the second part, provide one or two reasons or your experience(s) to support your opinion.

In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or make a summary.

You should supply an appropriate title for your composition.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, language and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

2013年度TEM4作文评分标准

说明：该项目满分15分。根据考生的思想与表达、语言运用能力和写作规范分别打分。分项可以打0.5分。

“思想与表达”满分7分， 按考生的表现赋分：

1----2----3---4---5----6----7

较差一般良好优秀

“语言运用能力”满分为6分， 按考生的表现赋分：

1----2----3---4---5----6

较差一般良好优秀

“写作规范”满分为2分， 按考生的表现赋分：

0.5------1----1.5------2

较差 一般 良好 优秀

空白卷、仅写了一些与任务无关的字句、仅仅照抄指导语得0分。阅卷教师不用计算总分。

Dictation Marking

1. 听写共分15小节；每节1分；每组评阅五句，每五句为一段。 2. 阅卷教师只需识别错误（小错误：0.25；大错误：0.5），并点击相关按钮，不用计算分值。 3. 每节最多扣1分；

4. 段内重复错误，仅扣一次；第二组：theory---fairy

5. 错误共分两类：小错误（minor mistakes）和大错误（major mistakes）。 A： 小错误：

1） 大小写、标点符号错误（如果标点影响后句的大小，算前句的一个小错）：

第一组： in real lifebecause of ---- in real life, because of; 第二组：dreams rather--- dreams, rather; important,----important 第三组： folders and delete---folders. and delete

2) 冠词错误：

第一组：a problem--- the problem; the solution---a solution; of polite society--- of the polite society 第二组：the solution---- a solution

第三组： the computer’s hard disk--- computer’s hard disk

B: 大错误：漏写、加词、造词、换词（冠词作小错记）， 单复数，拼写， 时态错误：

第一组：desires---desire/desired; rules---rule; solve,problems---solve problem; of polite society----of the society

例外： do not ---don’t/ donot; can’t----can not 按一个大错计（—0.5）； 第二组：this----these; to find---find; brain’s---brains; analysing /analyzing---analyse/ analyze in (—1 )； may be ---maybe(—1 ) 第三组：vey little of what we dream----very little what we dream 6. 下列情况不扣分：

第一组：deep, secret desires---deep secret desires; and wake up---…, and wake up

第二组：problem and ---problem, and

第三组：disk---disc; needed. But we all know---needed, but we all know

PART I Dication [15MIN]

Listen to the following passage.Altogether the passage will be read to your four times.During the first reading, which will be done at normal speed, listen and try to understand the meaning.For the second and third readings, the passage will be read sentence by sentence, or phrase by phrase, with intervals of 15 seconds.The last reading will then be given 2 minutes to check through your work once more.

Please write the whole passage on ANSWER SHEET ONE

2013年4级听写评分标准

WHAT ARE DREAMS FOR?(标题忽略不计)

第一组：

One theory is that we dream to release the deep, secret desires. / We do not express these desires in real life because of the rules of polite society. / Another theory is that dreams allow us to solve problems / that we can’t solve in real life. / We go to sleep with a problem and wake up with the solution. 第二组：

This may be a way to use our dreams rather than a purpose of dreaming. / If you believe that your dreams are important, / then analysing them may help you to focus on the problem / and help you to find the solution. / The modern image is that dreams are the brain’s way / 第三组：

of cleaning up the computer’s hard disk. / Dreams organize the events of the day into folders /and delete what is not needed. /But we all know that very little of what we dream/ is concerned with what happened to us that day./

篇二：TEM4作文句型

背景争议法 - Background 背景

? Being a controversial issue, the great popularity of making friends on line has aroused a great deal of attention in society during the past decades.

? Nowadays, the issue on the great popularity of making friends on line is highly debatable, and ideas vary from person to person.

? The past decades have witnessed the great leap in information technology and change in lifestyle in all aspects, which have put making on-line friends into heated debate.

? A controversy has arisen and stood unsolved for several years that whether it is a sound decision to build friendship on Internet.

? A heated debate has lasted for years regarding whether it is a sound decision to build friendship on Internet.

背景争议法 - Controversy 争议

? Some people think that it is good; other people think that it is bad. ? Some would claim net friends are so generous and considerate, while some others may suggest that on-line friendship has its own flaws.

? Some would claim net friends are so generous and considerate, while the idea that on-line friendship has its own flaws is still held by some others.

? Think →

claim / suggest / believe / advocate / maintain / argue / suppose ? Good →

beneficial / profitable / helpful / sound / decent

? Bad →

harmful / detrimental / hazardous

? Advantage →

merit / virtue / benefit / profit / pro

? Disadvantage →

demerit / drawback / flaw / shortcoming / con / cost

背景争议法 - Statement 观点

? 简洁明了 concrete & concise

? As for me, I side with the former / latter.

? As far as I am concerned, I believe having friends connected by Internet is advisable in everyday life.

? In my view, it is much better to have everyday life without having friends connected by Internet.

事例法 - Statement 观点

The lesson that can be drawn from the example is clear and simple: Conclusion 总结段

? Statement 观点 rewrite, not copy

? All in all / To conclude / In conclusion / In general / To sum up ? When all the above-mentioned factors are taken into consideration,

a conclusion could be drawn that …

? From my point of view,

? From where I stand,

Body 主体段

? To begin with / Firstly / First and foremost

? Secondly / In addition / Moreover

? In the third place / Furthermore / Last but not least

常见的论证方法

? 举例：形象化，生动化，易于理解

? 比较：

? 引用：it is reported that…,

it is said that…,

it is universally acknowledged that…,

it is revealed by official figure that…

? 反证：从with这个角度不好想到，那么就从without 入手阐述说明型题目

Background 背景

? According to a recent survey, an increasing number of youngsters take volunteer work, and this issue has aroused great public attention.

? It is reported …, which attracts great public concern.

? Currently,… is highly emphasized. However, the approaches vary

from person to person, and… win my favor.

TEM4写作 遣词用句升级练习

? 互联网是一个公众感兴趣和关注的话题。

? Internet is a topic that people are interested in and pay attention to. ? Internet is a topic of public interest and concern.

? 人们对此意见不一。

? Different people have different ideas about this.

? Ideas on this issue / topic vary from person to person.

? 这种行为对社会对个人都有好处。

? This behavior has benefit to society and individual.

? Such a behavior is beneficial, both socially and individually. ? 这种行为没什么好处。

? Such a behavior has little benefit.

? The benefit of such a behavior can not be expected.

? 在交流领域中，最热门的话题也许就是互联网的广泛使用。 ? In the area of communication, the hottest topic may be the wide use of Internet.

? In the field of communication, the most heated topic may be the wide application of Internet.

? 从朋友那里，我们能学到我们所需要的东西。

? From friends, we can learn things we need.

? From friends, we can learn what we need.

? 英语作为全球语言是目前世界最瞩目的现象之一。

? English, as a global language, is now one of the phenomena that receives most attention in the world.

? English, as a global language, is presently one of the most remarkable phenomena worldwide.

? 城市扩张对环境有负面影响。

? The larger city has a bad influence on the environment.

? Urbanization has a negative impact / effect on the environment. ? 在中国，由于传统的原因，老人主要是由他们的子女赡养。 ? In China, because of the traditional reasons, the old are mainly raised by their children.

? In China, traditionally, the old are mainly supported by their children.

? 子女有义务对年迈的父母尽孝。

? Children have the duty to show filial piety to the old parents. ? Children have the obligation to take care of the old parents. ? 老年人需要的是更多的精神安慰。

? Old men need more spiritual comfort.

? What the senior citizens need is more mental comfort.

? 广告增加了商品的成本。

? Advertisement increases the cost of goods.

? Advertisement adds cost to the commodities.

篇三：第六章 TEM4作文实践与范文点评

第六章 TEM4作文实践与范文点评

本章作文实践与范文点评部分有20套写作题目，每套题有供参考的写作范文。目的是让考生熟悉和了解四级写作题型和作文方式后进行实践演练，从而提高写作能力。

6.1 TEM4作文实践与范文点评(1)

[题目]

Even though Globalization affects the world‘s economics in a very positive way, it also have negative sides. What is your opinion about it? Write on ANSWER SHEET THREE a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

Major Disadvantages of Globalization

You are to write in three parts. In th(来自:www.Zw2.cn 爱 作文 网)e first part, state clearly what your view is. In the second part, support your view with appropriate reasons. In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

[范文]

With the rapid growth of economy, globalization has become increasingly important in our daily life. In this information explosion society, globalization plays a more and more important role—to make the human achievements shared immediately. Every concept has two sides---advantage and disadvantage, and there is no exception of globalization. Despite the fact that most people accept the advantages of globalization, I would like to list some disadvantages of globalization.

The first disadvantage of globalization is concerned with cultural problems. It is well acknowledged that every country has their own traditional culture and religion. But the impact of globalization makes them increasingly westernized. Moreover, it is more and more acceptable by the young generations who will influence the future of one country. The second disadvantage of globalization is concerned with economic problems. As we all know, globalization make the entire world become a global village. So any parts of this global economic system disruption will bring a devastating impact to other nations. Even more important is the fact that it will bring many unstable factors to everyone’s daily life.

In a word, no one can deny the important role of globalization play in modern society and in our life. But above major disadvantages take our seriousness into consideration of the effect of globalization and take some actions to resist negative effects and keep the positive one.

[点评]

该篇作文内容切题，紧抓住了全球化带来的负面劣势，观点明确，表达方面清晰流畅，有一定的说服力。作文在第一段中thesis statement表明了观点：“Despite the fact that most people accept the advantages of globalization, I would like to list some disadvantages of globalization”，第二部分阐述了全球化带来的两大负面影响即文化和经济，有一定的论据支持论点，最后一部分自然得出结论以

及建议：“But above major disadvantages take our seriousness into consideration of the effect of globalization and take some actions to resist negative effects and keep the positive one”，语法和句法基本无误。

6.2 TEM4作文实践与范文点评(2)

[题目]

Fake products are harmful in our daily life but they become more and more common as the same time bring a lot of social problems. How to solve the problem? Write on ANSWER SHEET THREE a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

How to Solve the Problem of Fake Products

You are to write in three parts. In the first part, state clearly what your view is. In the second part, support your view with appropriate reasons. In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

[范文]

When asked about the fake products, the overwhelming majority of people have the scotched experience of purchasing them. Recently the problem of fake commodities has aroused huge debate in the society.

It is no easy task to identify the reasons for this phenomenon which involves several factors. On the one hand, owing to the fierce competition, some manufacturers who are money-oriented consider that producing fake products are a short cut toward getting rich. And on the other hand, consumers have the illusion that the cheaper goods have the same quality with the genuine goods to use. Apparently, the harmfulness of counterfeit products is influencing customer and the whole society. Firstly, They do harm our healthy and bring about great loss in properties such as melamine in baby formula, poisonous color, Sudan Red in KFC, etc. What is more, the production of fake commodities is a great danger to our society, which will definitely destroy our social market-economy and destroy the basic reliance between people. Education should be popularized to enhance people’s awareness of the harmfulness of fake products.

In a word, to eradicate this grave phenomenon of our society, effective measures must be carried out and severe laws must be enforced to prevent the manufactures from producing unqualified products. We, every customer, also have the responsibility to resist fake products and hold up our rights.

[点评]

这篇文章偏题，只在最后段简单提了几点。考虑是否要重写

6.3 TEM4作文实践与范文点评(3)

[题目]

Most people consider the payment as the only condition when looking for jobs; there are also some other people thinking that their ideal jobs must be in accordance

with their interest. What is your opinion? Write on ANSWER SHEET THREE a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

Hunting Future Job for Interest or Salary?

You are to write in three parts. In the first part, state clearly what your view is. In the second part, support your view with appropriate reasons. In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

[范文]

Upon graduation, hunting job becomes one of the important issues for the graduate, which is a tough choice to them. Among them there are two types of attitude to hunting job. Some of students tend to give the priority to the interest in jobs but others feel that salary is the key factor to influence their choice. As for me, we should attach more importance to interest.

Most people take salary as the most important factor because they want to enjoy their living condition better. But as a graduate without abundance experience, we should pay more attention to personal development. Interest is relevant to zest for life, which will enhance our future career. Interest is an essential condition in success. Therefore, we should not only focus on accumulating fortune but also consider how much delight the job gives us. Focus on interest dose not mean out of realistic. In contrast, interest is an efficient way to turn our wisdom and ability into reality and helps us make self-fulfillment.

In a word, it is more important we should choose a job with the interest, that is, a job for which my learning has qualified us well. Thus, we can make achievements in it with confidence and expectation.

[点评]

该篇作文审题基本准确，结构上也较为清晰。第一段基本符合要求,thesis statement表明了自己的观点——As for me, we should attach more importance to interest；内容上稍有偏题，第二段中的personal development和interest的关系较为牵强，论证还不够充分，说服力有待考量。因此，第三段的结论也显得不够自然。语言句式基本正确，规范尚可。