What a happy day today.I ate a delicious breakfast in the moring.and watched TV in afternoon.After watched TV.I did my homework with favoirite friend.Then I played baasketball with my friends.In the evening I take a walk with my father and my mother.

What a happy day today.I ate a delicious breakfast in the moring.and watched TV in afternoon.After watched TV.I did my homework with favoirite friend.Then I played baasketball with my friends.In the evening I take a walk with my father and my mother.
What a happy day today.
I ate a delicious breakfast in the moring.
and watched TV in afternoon.
After watched TV.I did my homework with favoirite friend.
Then I played baasketball with my friends.
In the evening I take a walk with my father and my mother.

What a happy day today.I ate a delicious breakfast in the moring.and watched TV in afternoon.After watched TV.I did my homework with favoirite friend.Then I played baasketball with my friends.In the evening I take a walk with my father and my mother.
额,还是favourite拼错...
我直接帮你改了.
what a happy day today(用it is我认为更好）.
i ate a delicious breakfast in the morning and watched tv in afternoon.(美英一般在and前面不会分段和加标点,54也可以~）
after watching tv,i did my homework with my favourite friend.
then i played basketball with my friends.
in the evening i take a walk with my father and mother.
i had a happy day!
恩,7年级的文章最好多用点形态,例如：过去将来,过去的过去,过去完成时等等等等~
还有,不要用这么多段落,
这片比以前的好,
但是最好抓住中心~

What a happy day （it is)today!
I had a delicious breakfast in the morning and watched TV in the afternoon.
After watching TV,I did my homework with my favorite friend.
Then I played baasketball with my friends.
In the evening I took a walk with my father and my mother.
祝你进步！

记流水账啊 建议你多背一背新概念第二册

多么快乐的一天！
早上我吃了一顿美味的早餐，下午看电视。
看完电视，我和我最好的朋友一起写作业。
之后我和我的朋友们一起打篮球。
晚上我和爸爸妈妈一起散步。

有错误
watched TV in（the) afternoon
After(I) watched TV
favoirite friend (What do you mean?)最喜欢的朋友可以说最好的朋友best frident
my friends应该单数吧 与上文指同一人

What a happy day today.
I (had) a delicious breakfast in the moring.
and watched TV in (the) afternoon.
After watched TV.I did my homework with (my) favoirite friend(s)
Then I played baasketball with my friends.
In the evening I (took) a walk with my (parents )
我给你修改了下 括弧部分

今天很快乐。
早晨我吃了一顿很美味的早餐，然后下午看了电视。
看完电视后，我和我最好的朋友一起做作业。
之后我和我的朋友们一起打篮球。
晚上我和爸爸妈妈一起散步。
晕死，我还以为是翻译呢？
说实话有点像流水账，最好再加一些细节，你每一部分都可以再写的详细些啊，充实一下吧~~~...

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今天很快乐。
早晨我吃了一顿很美味的早餐，然后下午看了电视。
看完电视后，我和我最好的朋友一起做作业。
之后我和我的朋友们一起打篮球。
晚上我和爸爸妈妈一起散步。
晕死，我还以为是翻译呢？
说实话有点像流水账，最好再加一些细节，你每一部分都可以再写的详细些啊，充实一下吧~~~

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