英语达人,帮我修修几篇日记.July 16,2010 cloudyThis is the first week of our summer holiday.All of us are very happy.Why?Because we are free.And we have two months to do what we like to do.But we have a lot of homework.But I don't worry.Bec

英语达人,帮我修修几篇日记.July 16,2010 cloudyThis is the first week of our summer holiday.All of us are very happy.Why?Because we are free.And we have two months to do what we like to do.But we have a lot of homework.But I don't worry.Bec
英语达人,帮我修修几篇日记.
July 16,2010 cloudy
This is the first week of our summer holiday.All of us are very happy.Why?Because we are free.And we have two months to do what we like to do.But we have a lot of homework.But I don't worry.Because I can finish.In the summer holiday,I am plan to go to travel and do some meaningful things.I like summer holiday so.
July 30,2010 cloudy
Today is Friday.I am in Zhengzhou now.I come here have three weeks.Zhengzhou is a beautiful and big city.My parents work in here.So I usually go here in summer holiday.The day before yesterday,I made a new friend in here.She is a student girl.And she is very friendly to me.I feel happy!She play with me all week.I got a lot of fun.She is my frist friend in here.
August 14,2010 Sunny
The week was very busy.Because my father and I was traveling.This week,the weather is very good.On Monday,we went to zhengzhou animal park.I saw many animals.They are very lovely.I most like a lion,because they are the king of the forest.On Tuesday,we went to the Yellow River scenic spot.I learned a lot from here history knowledge.On Wednesday and Thursday,we went to zhengzhou forest park.I try to live in the wild.I feel very fresh.On Friday,my father showed me to a large shopping malls.Because I want to buy a gift to my good friends.The trave was over.We all had a good time.
August 28,2010 Sunny
I was back in Guangdong.The weather was so hot.I called me good friends at the first time.We got together in our old space.We talk together.All of us were feel sad.Because the summer holiday will over.But we also have a new target.We study hard together.
Then we went to the supermarket to buy some writing tools and some food.We were ready our things and welcome our new term.In my new term,I plan to study harder,day day up.Goodbye my happy summer holiday!
时态!我感觉错很多.

英语达人,帮我修修几篇日记.July 16,2010 cloudyThis is the first week of our summer holiday.All of us are very happy.Why?Because we are free.And we have two months to do what we like to do.But we have a lot of homework.But I don't worry.Bec
July 16,2010 cloudy
This is the first week of our summer holiday.All of us are very happy.Why?Because we are free[from school].And we have two months to do what we like to do.But we have a lot of homework.But I don't worry.Because I can finish.[During] the summer holiday,I plan to go [traveling] and do some meaningful things.I like summer holiday so[much].
July 30,2010 cloudy
Today is Friday.I am in Zhengzhou now.I [will stay] here for three weeks.Zhengzhou is a beautiful and big city.My parents work here.So I usually [come here] in summer holiday.The day before yesterday,I made a new friend here.She is a student.And she is very friendly to me.I feel happy!She play with me all week.I get a lot of fun.She is my frist friend in here.
August 14,2010 Sunny
[This] week is very busy.Because my father and I am traveling.This week,the weather is very good.On Monday,we went to [the zoo].I saw many animals.They were very lovely.I like [the lions most],because they are the king of the forest.On Tuesday,we went to the Yellow River scenic spot.I learned a lot of history knowledge from here.On Wednesday and Thursday,we went to zhengzhou forest park.I [tries] to live in the wild.I [felt] very fresh.On Friday,my father showed me to a large shopping malls.Because I wanted to buy a gift to my good friends.The travel was over.We all had a good time.
August 28,2010 Sunny
I was back in Guangdong.The weather was so hot.I called [my] good friends at the first time.We got together in the place we used to get together.We talked together.All of us were feeling sad.Because the summer holiday would be over.But we also had a new target.We studied hard together.
Then we went to the supermarket to buy some writing tools and food.We were ready getting our things and welcome our new term.In my new term,I plan to study harder,day day up.Goodbye my happy summer holiday!
呃 随便改了改 有什么问题可以再问我 很爱学习嘛 鼓励!

英语日记的日期是写在文章右上角的。第二行 we like to do删掉to do,第三行 finish后加them,I am planning, 第四行 to go to traveling , doing some meaningful things, so改为very much