看看我的作文写得怎么样?麻烦帮忙改一下 .Because of teenagers are the future of the motherland and the hope of nation ,therefore we need special attention .it is reported that the mumber of chinese teenager smokers has been on the ris

看看我的作文写得怎么样?麻烦帮忙改一下 .Because of teenagers are the future of the motherland and the hope of nation ,therefore we need special attention .it is reported that the mumber of chinese teenager smokers has been on the ris
看看我的作文写得怎么样?麻烦帮忙改一下 .
Because of teenagers are the future of the motherland and the hope of nation ,therefore we need special attention .it is reported that the mumber of chinese teenager smokers has been on the rise in recent years ,which has caused great concern among people in ail walks of life. There are several reasons that account for this fact life of vice.
First of all, it is easy for teenagers to get cigarettes, cigarettes are available almost everywhre. Toda’s teenagers have more spare money to buy what they want ,therefore ,we can control the sales of cigarettes object. Second, teenagers smoke because their adolescent years can make some people turn to smoking.a final, and perhaps most importamt , reason is some teenagers can’t make a good friends, therefore, they feel affection for their friends
In my opinion, I think the chinese government should have established the laws and regulations to help teenagers abundon smoking.

看看我的作文写得怎么样?麻烦帮忙改一下 .Because of teenagers are the future of the motherland and the hope of nation ,therefore we need special attention .it is reported that the mumber of chinese teenager smokers has been on the ris
Teenagers are future components of our society and the hope of our country.They are also the group who may need more attention...
First of all,it is incredibly easy for teenagers to gain access to cigarettes since they are made available almost everywhere...(need some evidences here)
Secondly,most of the smokers took up their smoking habit in their teenage...(don't quite understand what point you are trying to make here.)
Finally,smoking serves as a very handy friend-making tool for some of the teenagers who feel being left out and have a hard time making friends with others.

很好

就看第一句就错了。
because+句子
because of+名词
你这不看because of ,后面是teenagers are the future of the motherland and the hope of nation 。这里有谓语动词，那就是句子了呀