我写的一句话 好不好?a survy issued by the department of sociology at bejijing uiversity suggests that 54% college students suffer from burden 不管什么负担了.and it is a 4 % more than it was in 2007 关键是 那个 我非常 想用那
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我写的一句话 好不好?a survy issued by the department of sociology at bejijing uiversity suggests that 54% college students suffer from burden 不管什么负担了.and it is a 4 % more than it was in 2007 关键是 那个 我非常 想用那
我写的一句话 好不好?
a survy issued by the department of sociology at bejijing uiversity suggests that 54% college students suffer from burden 不管什么负担了.and it is a 4 % more than it was in 2007
关键是 那个 我非常 想用那个 than引导的 定语从句
我写的一句话 好不好?a survy issued by the department of sociology at bejijing uiversity suggests that 54% college students suffer from burden 不管什么负担了.and it is a 4 % more than it was in 2007 关键是 那个 我非常 想用那
您好,改动如下:
A 2008 survey conducted by the Department of Sociology at Peking Uiversity suggests/indicates/shows... that 54% college students are suffering from burden (不管什么负担了), which is 4% higher/more than that in 2007.
改动说明:(由于没有中文,就着英文改动也许会偏离您原来的意思,在此请您谅解)
问题应该是学术类的吧,那么用词和句式就是偏向正式的.
首先,如果是2008年的调查,我建议在句首survey前加上2008,使逻辑严密,并为下文和2007年的数据比较做好铺垫.
1,issue改成了conducted:不少官方报告中,由……机构做的调查之类的说法,用conducted比较多些.issue不太合适.
2,要注意的是,北京大学的英文名就是Peking University,连它自己的网站上也是如此翻译的.有很多中文名字的英文翻译并不就是拼音,比如孙中山(Sun Yat-sen),蒋介石(Chiang Kai-Shek)等等.
3,部门和学校名称得大写.
4,suffer变成了现在进行时,是因为如果用一般现在时不合逻辑,因为一般现在时还有一层含义就是表示亘古不变的真理.而调查只说明当时(2008年吧?)的状况,并不是永远这样.
5,也就是您最关心的部分,and it is a 4 % more than it was in 2007,为了使学术类文章句子逻辑紧密,在此可用定语从句的which来连接,您用的more没有问题,higher than也好用.
谢谢.