麻烦看一下有没有语法错误?It‘s the second time for me to be here to attend the spoken English contest.Last year,I got the first prize.My family embroider the picture on the clothes for a living.Myparents are not only bosses but also the

麻烦看一下有没有语法错误?It‘s the second time for me to be here to attend the spoken English contest.Last year,I got the first prize.My family embroider the picture on the clothes for a living.Myparents are not only bosses but also the
麻烦看一下有没有语法错误?
It‘s the second time for me to be here to attend the spoken English contest.Last year,I got the first prize.
My family embroider the picture on the clothes for a living.Myparents are not only bosses but also the workers;Look,they are working with embroidery machines.Sometimes I help them move the clothes.

麻烦看一下有没有语法错误?It‘s the second time for me to be here to attend the spoken English contest.Last year,I got the first prize.My family embroider the picture on the clothes for a living.Myparents are not only bosses but also the
文法上你写的句子并没有甚麼错,但句子结构则有修饰的须要,为了尊重你的原文,我照原意顺序替你更正如下:
It‘s the second time (for me to be here to attend改为 that I took part in) the spoken English contest.Last year,I got(可以考虑改为 won) the first prize.
My (family embroider 改为 family's business is embroidering) (去掉 the) picture(s) on (去掉the) clothes(去掉 for a living).My parents are not only bosses but also the workers;Look,they are working with embroidery machines (要加 now).Sometimes I help them (要加 to) move the clothes
更正後的版本:
It‘s the second time that I took part in the spoken English contest.Last year,I won the first prize.
My family's business is embroidering pictures on clothes.My parents are not only bosses but also the workers; Look,they are working with embroidery machines now.Sometimes I help them to move the clothes
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they are working with the embroidery machines。
注意上下文要连贯，句子和句子之间加一些承接副词。

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修改后参考如下：
It's my second time to take part in the English Speech Contest. I won its first prize last year.

My parents have their own business, embroidering pictures on clothes. Th...

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修改后参考如下：
It's my second time to take part in the English Speech Contest. I won its first prize last year.

My parents have their own business, embroidering pictures on clothes. They employ themselves and work with embroidery machines. This is a picture taken when they were working. Sometimes when I'm free, I help them move the clothes.

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