哪位能帮忙点评一篇托福作文(what is more important for a student,understand ideas and concepts or understand facts)Ideas and concepts are not independent to the facts,they are connected with facts.Facts are related with ideas and concepts

哪位能帮忙点评一篇托福作文(what is more important for a student,understand ideas and concepts or understand facts)Ideas and concepts are not independent to the facts,they are connected with facts.Facts are related with ideas and concepts
哪位能帮忙点评一篇托福作文
(what is more important for a student,understand ideas and concepts or understand facts)
Ideas and concepts are not independent to the facts,they are connected with facts.Facts are related with ideas and concepts,ideas and concepts cannot exist without facts.However,I think while learning,it is more important for students to learn ideas and concepts.
It is true that concepts and ideas cannot live without facts,but if you do not have a concept or idea to about a fact,you cannot understand what the fact is.
For example,in every place at every time,whatever a object move,it will land on the ground finally,but for many years people do not know why the objects are forced to the downward direction.This situation had never changed until Newton began to research the movement of objects and suggested three laws of moving of objects.After the concept of force makes object move and the gravity,people began to understand many facts of moving among objects.If there were no research of the movement,the idea of gravity,force will not come out,people will not able to understand why we can make things move and why the apples fall down from trees.
Not only we cannot understand a fact without concept,but also sometime we are not able to find the fact without the guidance of ideas and concepts.Since people began to research theoretical physics,people have been interested in how the mass of object comes.People think there is a mechanism endue the object mass,and this thing can be found,but people have no idea on how to prove it.Fortunately,some scientists like Peter Higgs predicted there must a side product during this mechanism happen.According to this idea,scientists are able to develop a concept and method to detect these products to prove the theory of mechanism.If there are no idea and concept about the predicted product,people may need many decades to find another way to understand the fact on how the mechanism endues mass to an object,and the development of theoretical physics may bog down.
On students in the terms of studying,the importance of understanding ideas and concepts first is obvious,without ideas and concepts,it is difficult for students to understand many facts which are happening around them.So in my standing point,I think it is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts first.

哪位能帮忙点评一篇托福作文(what is more important for a student,understand ideas and concepts or understand facts)Ideas and concepts are not independent to the facts,they are connected with facts.Facts are related with ideas and concepts
总体还算不错.但实考很难到good
首先逻辑已经符合托福要求了内容也还算可以.字数也不算少
语法方面细小的语法错误有点多（介词使用主谓一致多多少少有点错）
另外就是词汇的使用太土了.托福是语言考试所以多用高级词汇绝对会加分的

（什么是更重要的一个学生，理解思想和概念，或了解事实）
思想和概念不是独立的事实，他们是与事实。事实相关的想法和概念，思想和概念，不能存在的事实。然而，我认为在学习的同时，更重要的是对学生学习观念。
这是事实，概念和想法的生活不能没有事实，但是如果你没有一个概念或想法，一个事实，你不能明白事实。
例如，在每一个发生在每一个时间，任何一个物体的运动，它将地面的土地，最后，但多...

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（什么是更重要的一个学生，理解思想和概念，或了解事实）
思想和概念不是独立的事实，他们是与事实。事实相关的想法和概念，思想和概念，不能存在的事实。然而，我认为在学习的同时，更重要的是对学生学习观念。
这是事实，概念和想法的生活不能没有事实，但是如果你没有一个概念或想法，一个事实，你不能明白事实。
例如，在每一个发生在每一个时间，任何一个物体的运动，它将地面的土地，最后，但多年来人们不知道为什么对象是被迫向下的方向。这种情况没有改变直到牛顿开始研究物体的运动规律，提出了三运动的物体。后的概念，力使物体移动和重力，人们开始了解许多事实之间移动对象。如果没有研究的运动，万有引力的思想，将不出来，人们无法理解为什么我们能做的，为什么苹果会从树上掉落下来。
我们不仅不能理解事实没有概念，但也有时我们不能够找到事实的指导思想和概念。自从人们开始研究理论物理，人们一直在感兴趣的物体的质量是多少。人们认为是一个机制，赋予物体的质量，而这件事可以发现，但人们不知道该如何证明。幸运的是，一些科学家喜欢彼得黑格斯预测必须有一个副产品在这一机制发生。根据这一思想，科学家能够建立一个概念和方法检测这些产品证明机制的理论。如果没有思想和理念对预言的产品，可能需要几十年的时间找到另一种方式理解事实如何机制赋予质量的对象，和发展的理论物理可能停滞不前。
对学生的学习条件，必须了解的想法和概念首先是显而易见的，没有思想和概念，学生很难理解他们周围发生的许多事实是。所以在我来讲，我觉得更重要的是为学生理解理念和概念第一次。
写得很好，没有语法错误，而且中心明确。

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很好，就是有语法错误。最后一段第一句without前应是句号