自己写的六级作文,请英语大神指教一二?My view on helping others in need1.现在,在看到他人遇到困难时,很少有人去伸出援手；2.这个现象产生的原因；3.我的看法.My view on helping others in needAccordingto a

自己写的六级作文,请英语大神指教一二?My view on helping others in need1.现在,在看到他人遇到困难时,很少有人去伸出援手；2.这个现象产生的原因；3.我的看法.My view on helping others in needAccordingto a
自己写的六级作文,请英语大神指教一二?My view on helping others in need
1.现在,在看到他人遇到困难时,很少有人去伸出援手；
2.这个现象产生的原因；
3.我的看法.
My view on helping others in need
Accordingto a recent survey,about 78.9% of people will be not bound to give a hand toothers in need.It is well established that the situation of requesting a helpis usually a cheat.However,when people who indeed need helps are in trouble,keeping silence may cause a terrible result.
Whydo not many people help others in need?For one thing,it’s a lie.One askedfor help when he fell down the stairs.If you helped him,he might say,” Itmust be you to push me!Give me some money of the medicine.” In fact,thisphenomenon is occurring more frequently nowadays.For another,it isn’t a lie,but hit a man’s heart deeply.For instance,a number of people will presentthose who help them with a just indifferent face.What’s more,the warm-heartedman gives his life to save them.They still take it for granted that,” It'snone of my business.”
Inspite of the negative news of helping others,there is no need to reject to helpeveryone.I adhere to a faith that there are more good people than bad ones inthe world.As long as we are more careful,the help behavior will pay off in a lifetime.
哪里不好，具体指出来谢谢，不要只说好坏o~

自己写的六级作文,请英语大神指教一二?My view on helping others in need1.现在,在看到他人遇到困难时,很少有人去伸出援手；2.这个现象产生的原因；3.我的看法.My view on helping others in needAccordingto a
第一,把文章中的others改成people,并不是一有“别人”就得翻译从OTHERS.第二,bound有义务的,你不觉得别扭?换成be not willing to give...不情愿帮助别人.第三,situation of requesting a help is 改成situation where asking for help is.第四,即使是名词,help也是不可数的.第五,Itmust be you to push me,to改成who.第六,that,” It'snone of my business.”这句的标点符号整整,然后把THAT换成LIKE.第七,this phenomenon is occurring,换成 is occurring has been repeating itself.
你写的文章不怎么样.

你写的不错，尤其是这一句My view on helping others in need

不错，看来英语基础很好嘛，你写的语句通顺，用词恰当，不用请教高师了，你自己就是高师

首先，你这个百分数后面不能加介词of.
其实，文中出现了几处语法错误，动词0ccur是没有进行时态的，所以你的文中已经出现了现在进行时的语法结构，一篇好的文章不要求你的用词有多么华丽，但是你必须做到不能有任何纰漏，不要让自己犯错，如果能做到这一点，相信你的作文不会是什么问题。
最后，虽然你的文章采用了最常用的“三段式”，但是你的结尾不够表明自己的立场和观点，给读者一种含糊的概念，所...

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首先，你这个百分数后面不能加介词of.
其实，文中出现了几处语法错误，动词0ccur是没有进行时态的，所以你的文中已经出现了现在进行时的语法结构，一篇好的文章不要求你的用词有多么华丽，但是你必须做到不能有任何纰漏，不要让自己犯错，如果能做到这一点，相信你的作文不会是什么问题。
最后，虽然你的文章采用了最常用的“三段式”，但是你的结尾不够表明自己的立场和观点，给读者一种含糊的概念，所以我建议你最好采用In my opinion,I stand the viewpoint that等类似的句子。
这就是我个人的观点，希望能够帮到你！

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You need to revise and edit that whole thing. Some subject don't agree with the verbs. Also, your second sentence doesn't make sense at all. Your writing gives your readers the sense that you yourself don't understand the meaning of many of those words.