帮忙改两篇作文~关于奥运和地震这两篇文章里可能有好多问题,最好字数控制在60—80字左右.The 29th Olympic GamesThe 29th Olympic Games will be held in Beijing.As a Chinese I feel so happy.More and more foreigners came t

帮忙改两篇作文~关于奥运和地震这两篇文章里可能有好多问题,最好字数控制在60—80字左右.The 29th Olympic GamesThe 29th Olympic Games will be held in Beijing.As a Chinese I feel so happy.More and more foreigners came t
帮忙改两篇作文~关于奥运和地震
这两篇文章里可能有好多问题,最好字数控制在60—80字左右.
The 29th Olympic Games
The 29th Olympic Games will be held in Beijing.As a Chinese I feel so happy.More and more foreigners came to Beijing.I hope they can understand Beijing's culture.Such as the Beijing Peking Opera and the food.I hope the Chinese team in the Olympics was more gold medals than before.I think China is the best.I look forward to the Olympics.
第29届奥林匹克运动会将被举办在北京.作为一个中国人我因此感到高兴.越来越多的外国人来到北京.我希望他们能了解北京的文化.如北京的食物和京剧.我希望中国队能在奥林匹克运动会上获得比之前更多的金牌.我认为中国是最好的.我期待着奥运会.
The Wenchuan Earthquake
May 12,2008,the Chinese people know about this big news - Wenchuan earthquake.In this earthquake.Many people left this world,so I am sad but I am glad to see that more and more People to help Wenchuan.I hope I can help people in Wenchuan.In the future,Wenchuan building will be better than before.It will be a beautiful city.
2008年五月十二日,中国人知道了这大新闻--汶川大地震.在这场地震中.很多人离开了这个世界,因此我感到伤心.但是我很高兴看到越来越多的人帮助汶川.我希望我也能帮助汶川的人们.在将来,汶川会被建设得比之前更好.它将会是一个美丽的城市.

帮忙改两篇作文~关于奥运和地震这两篇文章里可能有好多问题,最好字数控制在60—80字左右.The 29th Olympic GamesThe 29th Olympic Games will be held in Beijing.As a Chinese I feel so happy.More and more foreigners came t
The 29th Olympic Games
The 29th Olympic Games will be held in Beijing.As a Chinese I feel so happy.More and more foreigners came to Beijing.I hope they can understand Beijing's culture.Such as the Beijing Opera and the food.I hope the Chinese team get more gold medals than before.I think China is the best.I look forward to the Olympics.
The Wenchuan Earthquake
May 12,2008,the Chinese people knew about this big news - Wenchuan earthquake.In this earthquake,Many people left this world,so I am sad but I am glad to see that more and more People to help Wenchuan.I hope I can help people in Wenchuan.In the future,Wenchuan will be building better than before.It will be a beautiful city.
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"The Games of the 29th Olympiad in 2008 are awarded to the city of Beijing."With the motto "New Beijing, Great Olympics", Beijing promises to host a "Green Olympics", a "Hi-tech ...

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"The Games of the 29th Olympiad in 2008 are awarded to the city of Beijing."With the motto "New Beijing, Great Olympics", Beijing promises to host a "Green Olympics", a "Hi-tech Olympics" and the "People's Olympics".
Chinese people always appreciate the purposes and principles of Olympic ideal, support the efforts of Olympic Games to promote world peace. The Chinese Government and people are doing our the utmost/best to prepare for the 2008 Olympic Games in Beijing, and shooting at the pageant with advocating Olympic ideal, sparkpluging world peace and enhancing the relationships among the world. Olympic spirit are gonna spread again in orient cultural ancient China.
The government and people of China have always admired the purposes and principles of the Olympic spirit and supported the efforts made by the Olympics in promoting world peace. The Chinese government and people are doing our utmost in preparation for the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. It is our hope to make it a grand gathering that will carry forward the Olympic spirit, promote world peace and enhance the friendship among people of the world, so that the Olympic spirit will flourish once again, this time in China, an oriental country with an ancient civilization.
中国人民一向赞赏奥林匹克精神的宗旨和原则，支持奥林匹克运动为促进世界和平所做的努力。中国政府和中国人民正全力以赴，做好2008年北京奥运会的筹备工作，力争把2008年奥运会办成一次弘扬奥林匹克精神、促进世界和平、增进各国人民友谊的盛会，让奥林匹克精神在中国这一东方文明古国 再次得到发扬。
Strong earthquake damage so large, to show once again brought out. In the vicinity of the epicenter, and in some cities and villages, many houses collapsed and damaged roads, telecommunications disruption, many schools and hospitals have become ruins. Human vibrant homes, Zhuanshun between appalling.
This is a natural disaster caused by difficult to avoid the tragedy, it is sad. And this kind of tragedy, and in fact the long history of human companions, Ruyingsuixing. Far not said that the 1976 Tangshan earthquake, despite the past 32 years but has remained a matter of fear. In 1998 the major flood disaster in 2003, the "atypical pneumonia" crisis, the end of 2004 Indian Ocean tsunami and the recent tropical storm in Myanmar, have caused a large number of casualties and property losses. Human nature is no stranger to disaster, but when Wenchuan earthquake and the plain reality of the time, the natural power of human beings before the fragile, exposed completely.
Wenchuan earthquake, the people to disaster areas has caused tremendous physical and mental suffering, but also makes the map as a small region, the people throughout the country the most about the place. As a so-called human life, compatriots suffering in some of the time, the country's grief out of the full performance. The international community has also expressed concern about the rapid and condolences.
When a major earthquake has occurred, and aftershocks continued, the key word at this time only a matter of fact the word "save" and "assistance." In a sense, the "assistance" is also "save" an integral part. There is no doubt that relief has become China's current government and the people most important task.
Disaster relief to save what » This seems to be without a thought. But in fact, the true meaning of disaster relief must be clarified. The primary task of relief, when in order to save lives. Compared with the life, property loss and post-disaster reconstruction and so has been relatively minor, or that include the rescue of property and the seismic reflection of the problem, should be moved back to "save lives" extremely important After that.
In the earthquake disaster site to direct rescue of Premier Wen Jiabao said a word, "as long as both hands, will be able to rebuild their homes" - these words to the real interpretation of the true meaning of the disaster. In other words, this is also the Chinese government will as a primary task of saving the idea of the source. That is only one life, not to the other of alternative, the response must be to the fastest speed, with the GREatest efforts, even at the cost to take any means, "at any cost," the disaster areas to save people's lives.
This means that the government-led rescue system should be the focus fell on the lives of the rescue. With the passage of time, the number of casualties will also continue to increase. Safety of the lives of tens of thousands of people, in fact, the most severe disaster order. As long as there's hope that the front line, who must rescue efforts to hundredfold, from the ruins in search for possible survivors, from under collapsed buildings in a rescue every life.
It should be noted that not only rely on relief confidence, courage and a spirit of solidarity, but also rely on the professional rescue teams and technical configuration. Although available for disaster relief to everyone, but under certain conditions, relief is also a live technical, professional and strong, high-risk, large amount of labor. Can not fail to mention that Chinese soldiers once again played a "steel wall" role in the relief difficult conditions, the elite combat units in the affected areas to give full expression to the mighty army of glory. The young Chinese soldiers in the affected areas of the rescue scenario is indeed deeply felt the blood is thicker than water like fish and water deeply.
Will save lives as the overriding priority, also means that aid must race against time, and death race. Those dying in the ruins of the life, is eagerly awaited relief. "Time is life," meaning, at this point has been the most vivid expression. Early into the second relief to the affected areas, we can save a life back. In the epicenter of local traffic inconvenience or even interrupted the circumstances, Premier Wen Jiabao asked the rescue team "is to walk as soon as possible into the most affected areas," highlighted the earthquake relief the importance of the concept of time.
It should also be noted that the earthquake disaster relief is not just a matter of the Government. As the face of ever, a major natural disaster, the government's influence, life-saving operations, but also relies on public and non-governmental organizations surmount. Including encouraging the spirit of the people of disaster areas, material support, including positive and practical actions, such as blood donation, both will have a positive effect rescue operations. Wenchuan after the earthquake, many enterprises and individuals, has begun an emergency donation of property, to the most needed areas. Non-disaster areas the people's blessings and encouragement, people have fully felt the warmth and firm national strength.
No Valentine's love of natural disasters. In a battle to save the lives of all people, the victory will come after a disaster test of the Chinese nation.
强地震的破坏力如此之大，又一次淋漓尽致地呈现出来。在震中以及附近的一些城市与乡村，许多房屋倒塌，道路毁坏，电信中断，不少学校与医院成了废墟。人类生机勃勃的家园，转瞬之间惨不忍睹。
这是一场由自然灾难造成的难以躲避的悲剧，令人悲痛。而这样的悲剧，事实上与人类漫长的历史相伴，如影随形。远的不说，1976年的唐山大地震，尽管已经过去32年，但至今依然令人心有余悸。1998年的特大洪涝灾害、2003年的“非典”危机、2004年底的印度洋海啸，以及最近发生在缅甸的热带风暴，都造成了大量的人员伤亡和财产损失。人类对于自然灾难并不陌生，但是，当汶川大地震现实地摆在眼前的时候，人类在自然威力前的脆弱，显露无遗。
汶川大地震，给灾区的民众造成了巨大的身心痛苦，也使得地图上那样一个狭小的区域，成为全国人民最为牵挂的地方。所谓人命关天，在部分同胞受难之时，举国的悲恸充分表现了出来。国际社会也迅速表达了关切与慰问。
当一场大地震已经发生，而且余震不断，此时的关键词其实只剩下两个字，即“救”与“援”。某种意义上，“援”也是“救”的组成部分。毫无疑问，救灾已成为当前中国政府与民众最为重要的任务。
救灾救什么？这似乎是一个无须思考的问题。但事实上，救灾的真义必须得到厘清。救灾的第一要务，当为拯救生命。与生命相比，财产的损失与灾后的重建等都已经相对次要，或者说，包括抢救财产以及对于地震中出现问题的反思等，都应该退到“拯救生命”这一极端重要的议题之后。
在地震灾害现场指挥抢救的温家宝总理说过一句话，“只要有双手，家园就能重建”——这句话真切地诠释出了救灾的真义所在。换言之，这也是中国政府将救人作为首要任务的理念之源。正因为生命只有一次，无法以其他之物替代，故救灾者必须以最快的速度，以最大的努力，甚至不惜采取任何手段，“不惜任何代价”，拯救灾区民众的生命。
这意味着，以政府为主导的救援体系须将重心落在对生命的挽救上。随着时间的推移，伤亡数字也将会不断增加。数万人的生命安危，其实就是最严厉的灾情命令。只要有一线的希望，救援者就必须以百倍的努力，从废墟中寻找可能的生还者，从正在倒塌的建筑物中抢救出每一个生命。
应该看到，救灾不仅依赖信心、勇气与团结的精神，也依赖专业的救援队伍与技术配置。尽管人人都可为救灾尽力，但在一定条件下，救灾又是一个技术活，专业性强、风险度高、劳动量大。不能不提到，中国军人又一次发挥了“钢铁长城”的作用，在艰苦的救灾条件下，作战在灾区的精锐部队充分体现出了威武之师的雄风。年轻的中国军人在灾区救援的情景，确实令人深切地感到了血浓于水的鱼水深情。
将拯救生命视为压倒一切的首要任务，也意味着，救援者必须争分夺秒，与死神赛跑。那些废墟里奄奄一息的生命，正在急切地等待救助。“时间就是生命”的含义，在此时也得到了最真切地体现。救援者早一秒进入受灾地区，就能早抢救出一个生命。在震中地区交通不便甚至中断的情况下，温家宝总理要求救援队伍“就是步行也要尽快进入受灾最严重的地区”，突出强调了地震救援之时间概念的重要性。
还应该看到，地震救灾不仅仅是政府之事。如同面对以往任何一场重大自然灾害一样，在政府之力之外，拯救生命的行动，还依赖于民众与非政府机构众志成城。包括给予灾区人民的精神激励、物质的支持，以及包括积极献血等切实的行动等，均会对救援行动产生积极效果。汶川大地震发生之后，不少企业与个人，已开始紧急捐赠财物，运往最需要的地方。非灾区民众发出的祝福与鼓励，已让人充分感受到了温暖而坚定的民族力量。
天灾无情人有情。在一场拯救生命的全民战斗中，胜利终将属于历经灾难考验的中华民族.

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