大侠们帮我挑挑错呗,这片英语自我介绍要急用谢谢阿The idea of being a research scientist and running a business of my own both interest me a lot.So it is nice to know that I need not give up any of them when studying here in the U

大侠们帮我挑挑错呗,这片英语自我介绍要急用谢谢阿The idea of being a research scientist and running a business of my own both interest me a lot.So it is nice to know that I need not give up any of them when studying here in the U
大侠们帮我挑挑错呗,这片英语自我介绍要急用谢谢阿
The idea of being a research scientist and running a business of my own both interest me a lot.So it is nice to know that I need not give up any of them when studying here in the University of Hong Kong.
I am fond of physics and chemistry because they make me excited.I enjoyed making toys by myself while other kids preferred ready-made ones.I made myself a small microscope with a light on it.I made small things like an alarm bell for fun.I managed to 把锌镀在铜导线上when把通电的铜导线放到zncl2溶液里to see what will happen at 14.In fact I have a small lab of my own with chemicals and parts taken from broken electrical appliances.I do experiment myself when I think the idea they are taking about on a magazine or a website is doesn’t make sense to me.And after that I would mail them my point of view.Unluckily it is quite often happens that I find myself wrong years later.
I am also interested in management and finance,I once owned a club,which lasted for half a year.I did some part time jobs,those works were mainly on promotion.Joining the University of Hong Kong uniquely enables me to pursue my passions and I look forward to beginning this exciting endeavor.

大侠们帮我挑挑错呗,这片英语自我介绍要急用谢谢阿The idea of being a research scientist and running a business of my own both interest me a lot.So it is nice to know that I need not give up any of them when studying here in the U
So it is nice to know that I need not give up any of them .
need not 用法值得推敲 不如should not
they make me excited改成they are exciting 更地道一些
part time **part-time

idea如果你当作单数的话，后面的interst就要用单三形式，不过根据后文来看应该是ideas

现在的人都很势力
你就认了吧.............