英语自我介绍,帮我看看何不合适,还有哪些语法错误,连贯性咋滴,顺便帮我改改哦,先拜个谢咯Good morning ,boys and girls,I am glad to stand here to introduce myself.Firstly,my name is xiao jiahui ,i am a freshman in the

英语自我介绍,帮我看看何不合适,还有哪些语法错误,连贯性咋滴,顺便帮我改改哦,先拜个谢咯Good morning ,boys and girls,I am glad to stand here to introduce myself.Firstly,my name is xiao jiahui ,i am a freshman in the
英语自我介绍,帮我看看何不合适,还有哪些语法错误,连贯性咋滴,顺便帮我改改哦,先拜个谢咯
Good morning ,boys and girls,I am glad to stand here to introduce myself.
Firstly,my name is xiao jiahui ,i am a freshman in the college and studying in the Guangdong Youth Career Academy .by the way ,there are 5 people in my family ,Both my father and my mother are farmers ,and i am the youngest one in my family.secondly,in my space time ,i like to read novels,i think reading could tranquilize and enlighten the mind as well as make me forget some unhappy things and troubles,in addition to reading,i also like to read comics and watch cartoons,such as naruto,one piece ,bleach and fairy tail.however, a lot of grownups think watching cartoons is childish in china ,but i don't think so.
because i awalys get some spiritual power from comics and sometimes was deeply moved by their pure friendship .third, i have a dream ,i wish there is no poor people in the world
and no hate among people.As The Final Speech of “the Great Dictator”said,
We all want to help one another. Human beings are like that. We want to live by each other's happiness - not by each other's misery. We don't want to hate and despise one another. In this world there's room for everyone and the good earth is rich and can provide for everyone.

英语自我介绍,帮我看看何不合适,还有哪些语法错误,连贯性咋滴,顺便帮我改改哦,先拜个谢咯Good morning ,boys and girls,I am glad to stand here to introduce myself.Firstly,my name is xiao jiahui ,i am a freshman in the
Good morning ,boys and girls,
当你是长辈的时候用boys和girls,如果是同辈的话最好还是everyone
.by the way ,there are 5 people in my family ,Both my father and my mother are farmers ,
my father and my mother 改 my parent
secondly,in my space time ,i like to read novels,
改 I like reading novels when I am free.like to do想要做某事,like doing 习惯做某事
i think reading could tranquilize and enlighten the mind as well as make me forget some unhappy things and troubles,
make- makes
in addition to reading,i also like to read comics and watch cartoons,such as naruto,one piece ,bleach and fairy tail.
如果你是想表达除了读书,不要用in addtion to 用besides
.third,i have a dream ,i wish there is no poor people in the world
and no hate among people.
此句太繁琐,改成.I wish there are no poverty and hatred in the world.

序数词什么的还有by the way可以去掉或者替换成and、plus之类的。
and i am the youngest one in my family多余了，可以不要。
东西有点多、杂，可以看看有什么和你自我介绍的场景不相关的内容可以删掉。
内个。。。我才高一，所以眼光有局限，不要介意哈！...

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序数词什么的还有by the way可以去掉或者替换成and、plus之类的。
and i am the youngest one in my family多余了，可以不要。
东西有点多、杂，可以看看有什么和你自我介绍的场景不相关的内容可以删掉。
内个。。。我才高一，所以眼光有局限，不要介意哈！

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boys and girls可以改成guys，i'm glad to be here to ....家庭成员介绍没有必要，空闲时间不是space time ，而是free time，而且应该用during。仇恨的名词时hatred。however, a lot of grownups think watching cartoons is childish in china ,but i don...

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boys and girls可以改成guys，i'm glad to be here to ....家庭成员介绍没有必要，空闲时间不是space time ，而是free time，而且应该用during。仇恨的名词时hatred。however, a lot of grownups think watching cartoons is childish in china ,but i don't think so.because 这一句没有什么必要，貌似你这个年纪的小朋友都是看着动画片长大的.....

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觉得boys and girls怪怪的，不是很正式，看你场合了。
去掉Firstly，Secondly，thid。
by the way不是很正式。
because改成since，然后后面再加一句卡通对你的影响之类的。
is改成will be
最后再加个“It's totally what I think”之类的。
结尾：Thank you for ...

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觉得boys and girls怪怪的，不是很正式，看你场合了。
去掉Firstly，Secondly，thid。
by the way不是很正式。
because改成since，然后后面再加一句卡通对你的影响之类的。
is改成will be
最后再加个“It's totally what I think”之类的。
结尾：Thank you for listening.之类的
感觉没什么逻辑。。都是生搬硬套的公式。。前后文衔接蛮弱的。。。不过自我介绍这样就凑合了。

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Good morning everyone. It's a great pleasure for me to have an opportunity to introduce myself here.
My name is Xiao Jiahui, I'm a first year college student studying in the Guangdong Youth Career...

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Good morning everyone. It's a great pleasure for me to have an opportunity to introduce myself here.
My name is Xiao Jiahui, I'm a first year college student studying in the Guangdong Youth Career Academy. There are 5 of us in my family; both of my parents are farmers, and I'm the youngest among the 3 children.
In my spare time, I read a lot of novels. Reading to me is soul tranquilizing and mind enlightening, it can also make me forget about troubles and unhappy things. Besides reading novels, I also like reading comics and watching Anime, such as Naruto, One Piece, Bleach, and some fairy tales. Although many adults think watching Anime is a childish act, I do not agree. I always find encouraging power and positive energy boost from comics, often I am also deeply moved by the pure friendships portrayed in them.
I have a dream; I wish there is no poverty in the world and no hatred among people. As said in the final speech of "The Great Dictator", "We all want to help one another. Human beings are like that. We want to live by each other's happiness - not by each other's misery. We don't want to hate and despise one another. In this world there's room for everyone and the good earth is rich and can provide for everyone."

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