求批改 英语作文 Do small events lead to catastrophes or are great events initiated by other causes?I do agree that small events can turn out to be great events with the passing of time.People always argue that“Rome isn’t built in one day.

求批改 英语作文 Do small events lead to catastrophes or are great events initiated by other causes?I do agree that small events can turn out to be great events with the passing of time.People always argue that“Rome isn’t built in one day.
求批改 英语作文 Do small events lead to catastrophes or are great events initiated by other causes?
I do agree that small events can turn out to be great events with the passing of time.People always argue that“Rome isn’t built in one day.” However,it’s worth noting that many catastrophes and great events just happened in a night.As an example,“Butterfly Effect” illustrates that a wave caused by a little butterfly can turn out to be a horrible tornado thousands miles away.In humans’history,we can find an abundance of these exemples,including the dying of Inca Empire,which is said to be a result of climate change.
On the other hand,chances are there that little events can turn out to be unexpectedly huge achievements.The apple that fell to Newton’s head can perfectly verify this point.Archimedes’s rule was found when the famous scientist was bathing.
Therefore,it’s imagenary that one little step may lead to great changes.Just as Armsteran mentioned:“This is a small step for man,a giant leap for human beings.”Based on this point,we should be wary about the seemingly controllable events now:global warming,extinction of rare animals,etc in that we may save out Earth from a catastrophe at a small cost now.On the other hand,we should invest more to investigate those seemingly worthless projects like the research of the outer space,or the research of gene for we may realize the far-reaching implications of these investments only after a long time.

求批改 英语作文 Do small events lead to catastrophes or are great events initiated by other causes?I do agree that small events can turn out to be great events with the passing of time.People always argue that“Rome isn’t built in one day.
I agree that small events can turn into a big disater by the time passing.As what the people always says'Rome is not built in one day'.Some people may argue that there are so many catastrophes happend at once.However the best explanation is 'the butterfly effect' which means a wave caused by a butterfly can cause a great tornado on the other side of the earth.In human's history,there are lots of examples which can support this idea.For example,the vanished Inca empire which the scientists believed that it was caused by climate change(这个例子我觉得不太能支持你的论点,但我一时想不到什么好例子).
不要用On the other hand来连接,除非上文你用了On one hand.
Furthermore,some minor things can trigger some unexpected huge events.The apple hit Newton's head can perfectly approve my point above.Also whoever think bathing and any relation to Archimedes' rule?But that's what happend in the true history（这个例子有点牵强.）
Therefore,it can be seem that one little step may lead to great changes.Armsteran who was the first human landed on moon said that a small step for man could be a giant leap for human beings.（建议尽量少用直接引用）Based on the discuss above,we can see the things we can do for some great evening,like global warming and rare animals' extinction,is to start from something minor,such as saving water.Also,we should put more attention and investment on the projects which seems worthless now,for example the research on outer space and gene.I believe these research will change human being's life totally in the futuer.
你的想法非常好,但是整体的安排欠佳.我不知道你上几年级,但是从你的行文中可以看出你很有想法.继续努力一定能写出更好的文章.我的改动是根据我个人的口味,并不是一定要这么改,仅仅给你做个参考.

I do agree that small events can turn out to be great ones with the passing of time. People always say that“Rome isn’t built in one day.” However, it’s worth noting that many catastrophes and great ev...

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I do agree that small events can turn out to be great ones with the passing of time. People always say that“Rome isn’t built in one day.” However, it’s worth noting that many catastrophes and great events just happened overnight. For example,“Butterfly Effect” illustrates that a wave caused by a little butterfly can turn out to be a horrible tornado thousands of miles away. In man's history,we can find a great number of these exemples, including the dying of Inca Empire,which is said to have been the result of climate changes.
On the other hand, there are chances that little events can turn out to be unexpectedly huge achievements.The apple that fell to Newton’s head can perfectly verify this point. Archimedes's rule was found when the famous scientist was bathing.
Therefore, it's possible that one small step may give rise to a great change.Just as Armstrong mentioned:“This is a small step for a man, a giant leap for human beings.”Based on this point,we should be wary about the seemingly controllable events now:global warming,and potential extinction of rare animals,etc In what can we save our Earth from a catastrophe at a small cost now? On the other hand,we should invest more to investigate those seemingly worthless projects like the research of the outer space,or the research of genes so that we may realize the far-reaching implications of these investments in the future.

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