帮我检查一下英语日记我是一名刚学英文的菜鸟,写了篇英语日记,Saturday,October 11,2009Today i book a basic class .The class's subject is weather.The weather has another mean thatdescribe the somebody was ill.For example "I'm u

帮我检查一下英语日记我是一名刚学英文的菜鸟,写了篇英语日记,Saturday,October 11,2009Today i book a basic class .The class's subject is weather.The weather has another mean thatdescribe the somebody was ill.For example "I'm u
帮我检查一下英语日记
我是一名刚学英文的菜鸟,写了篇英语日记,
Saturday,October 11,2009
Today i book a basic class .The class's subject is weather.The weather has another mean that
describe the somebody was ill.For example "I'm under the weather" .In the class a girl is as white as snow
sat by my side.But i still go to listen to the teacher.Today It's cloud(overcast).I like cloud very much.i
offten walk on the street that wait for rainning when it's cloud.The wind is blowing than i walking in the
rain.it's feel so good.But sometime it's stormy than lightning usually accompanies thunder bad luck.
Many people like sunny.In the hoilday someboday have a sunbath at the seaside.some clouds floating
in the sky so beautiful.The temperature between 33 and 36 degrees celsiues(centigrade) so
comfortable.

帮我检查一下英语日记我是一名刚学英文的菜鸟,写了篇英语日记,Saturday,October 11,2009Today i book a basic class .The class's subject is weather.The weather has another mean thatdescribe the somebody was ill.For example "I'm u
Saturday,October 11,2009
Today I have booked a basic class .The class's subject was weather.Weather has another meaning which describes that somebody is ill,for example,I'm under the weather.A girl sat by my side has a white skin as the snow.But I still listened carefully to the teacher.Today is cloudy (overcast).I like cloud very much.I often walk on the street and wait for raining when it's cloudy.The wind is blowing when I walking in the rain.It feels so good.But sometime it's stormy and lightning usually accompanies thunder.Many people like sunny.In the holiday many people will have a sunbath by the seaside.Some clouds floating in the sky so beautiful.The temperature between 33 and 36 degrees Celsius (centigrade) is so comfortable.
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Today I book a basic class .the subject of the lesson is weather. The weather has another meaning that it can be used to describe somebody was ill.For example "I'm under the weather" .In the class a ...

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Today I book a basic class .the subject of the lesson is weather. The weather has another meaning that it can be used to describe somebody was ill.For example "I'm under the weather" .In the class a girl is as white as snow sat beside me. But I still listen to the teacher. Today It's cloud(overcast).I like cloud very much.I often walk on the street and wait for rainning when there are black clouds.The wind blows on me and while I am walking in the rain. I feel so good about this. However sometime it's stormy and lightning, it is a bad sign when thunders come.
Many people like sunny.In the hoilday someboday have a sunbath at the seaside.Clouds floating in the sky are so beautiful.The temperature between 33 and 36 degrees celsiues(centigrade)is so comfortable.

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Saturday,October 11, 2009
Today i book a basic class .The subject is weather.The weather has another mean which
describe the somebody is ill.For example "I'm under the weather" .In the class...

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Saturday,October 11, 2009
Today i book a basic class .The subject is weather.The weather has another mean which
describe the somebody is ill.For example "I'm under the weather" .In the class a girl is as white as snow
sat by my side.But i still listened to the teacher.Today It's cloudy.I like cloud day very much.i
often walk on the street waiting for rainning when it's cloudy.The wind is blowing while i walking in the
rain. it's feel so good.
Many people like sunny day.In the hoilday someboday have a sunbath at the seaside.some white clouds are floating
in the sky .The temperature is comfortable between 33 and 36 centigrade.
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