麻烦大家帮我修改文章的语病Prison break which was a american drama that showed over today.it's such an exciting love stroy and adventur story that i have never loved americn drama like this.micheal scofield was a impressive name in everyo

麻烦大家帮我修改文章的语病Prison break which was a american drama that showed over today.it's such an exciting love stroy and adventur story that i have never loved americn drama like this.micheal scofield was a impressive name in everyo
麻烦大家帮我修改文章的语病
Prison break which was a american drama that showed over today.it's such an exciting love stroy and adventur story that i have never loved americn drama like this.micheal scofield was a impressive name in everyone's memory,even the ending of prison break he was died unfortunately.when i watched over the last action,i enter the BBS about prison break,i want to share and listen the feeling that from everyone's heart.we supposed micheal scofield was a seed to planted in our heart four years ago,and now it has grown a huge tree which could't be instead.
prison break had been accompanying with us for many years,do you remember that we used to wait for a week and just to see the forty minutes show,it's funny right,lol.
we should go to the correct way and do our business whatever prison break couldn't back again,but we should remember all of the face that appears in it.MICHEAL SCOFIELD ,LINCON BURROWS,SARA,MAHONE,SUCRE,LJ,KELLERMAN,BRAD BELLICK,JOHN ABRUZZI ...

麻烦大家帮我修改文章的语病Prison break which was a american drama that showed over today.it's such an exciting love stroy and adventur story that i have never loved americn drama like this.micheal scofield was a impressive name in everyo
1 a american drama -an
2 stroy-story
3 adventur-adventure
4 have never loved americn drama like this是想表达从来没有像这样喜欢一部美剧是吗?这样表达不妥应该成The most +形容词 I have ever seen 这样更符合英语习惯,而不chinglish.
5 a impressive name -an 楼主冠词要留意,元音音节前+an
6 even-although这里你是想说尽管的意思吧
7 enter-entered 过去式
8 want-wanted
9 listen- listen to 听什么是listen to ,比如listen to music
10 michael scofield-人名首字母大写
11 a seed to planted-a seed which was planted
12 instead-instead of
13 wait for a week and just to see- wait for a week just to see就是去掉and
14 whatever prison break couldn't back -even though prison break couldn't be back
15 face-faces
错误还真不少,继续努力吧,PS本人也喜欢Prison Break

第一句话的语法有问题，时间状语用today，就不能用一般过去时态。
第二句话，逻辑关系有问题，such……that的意思是“如此……以至于”，你说的意思应该用and连接。
inpressive前应该用冠词an。
“the ending of prison break”是个时间状语，应该有介词，可以改为“at the end of the film”。
时态有问题，用...

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第一句话的语法有问题，时间状语用today，就不能用一般过去时态。
第二句话，逻辑关系有问题，such……that的意思是“如此……以至于”，你说的意思应该用and连接。
inpressive前应该用冠词an。
“the ending of prison break”是个时间状语，应该有介词，可以改为“at the end of the film”。
时态有问题，用了watched，后面就应该用entered，wanted，listened。
listen只表示“听”这个动作，没有“聆听”的意思。
直接就写“the feeling from everyone's heart”就行了，不需要用定语从句，何况你的从句里还没有谓语，根本构不成从句。
你混淆了to do和done的用法，seed被planted，done表示被动，to do没有这个意思。
grow into，固定词组。
大树不能被代替，instead后需要加of。
just前不需要加and，等待一周只为看那四十分钟，to do表示目的。
correct表示“对的”，right表示“正确的”，应该用right。
whatever后面接形容词，而不是句子。
back为副词，需要动词be搭配。
face是可数名词，这里需要使用复数形式。
it指代不明确，应该明确指出是this film。
整体来看：
1 中国式英语太过严重；
2 时态不清晰。

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