麻烦看一下语法/词汇错误I remember the first time I rode bike.My mother bought abike for my 5 years old birthday,It's a wonderful bike Inever seen,and I still storage it.At that time,Even though I don't know how to rode it,butI really wante

麻烦看一下语法/词汇错误I remember the first time I rode bike.My mother bought abike for my 5 years old birthday,It's a wonderful bike Inever seen,and I still storage it.At that time,Even though I don't know how to rode it,butI really wante
麻烦看一下语法/词汇错误
I remember the first time I rode bike.My mother bought a
bike for my 5 years old birthday,It's a wonderful bike I
never seen,and I still storage it.
At that time,Even though I don't know how to rode it,but
I really wanted to try.So I went to square with my own
bike.when I arrived at square.I began rode my bike,I plaued
very slow,when I thought I can control it,I increased my
speed.I rode faster and faster,I thought I was a blade
can cut the wind.No one can stop me.
But the weather was bad.the rain came,I played very happy
regardless of the rain.I still riding.Because of I rode
too fast,and the rain became heavy,I can't control my bike.
Acturally,I was fallen down.But I felt very happy.I can
rode bike!
whole of my body got wet.So I had to go home.I was so
excited and forgot the pain I made.That's my unforgettable
event in my memory.

麻烦看一下语法/词汇错误I remember the first time I rode bike.My mother bought abike for my 5 years old birthday,It's a wonderful bike Inever seen,and I still storage it.At that time,Even though I don't know how to rode it,butI really wante
呵呵,有一些小问题.
主要的几个,楼主有几个can忘记改成could了
从句没有加连接词,
大小写没有注意
句号和逗号没有注意
though和but
还有,楼主一个actually拼错了（也许是我不知道新词,不过我实在想不出acturally是个什么词,如果改错了,请告知）.
楼主问的是语法,所以我没有改动用词.
看看行不行：)
I remember the first time I rode a bike.My mother bought a
bike for my 5 years old birthday,It was a wonderful bike I had
never seen,and I still store it.
At that time,even though I didn't know how to ride it,
I really wanted to try.So I went to a square with my own
bike.When I arrived at the square,I began to ride my bike.
I stepped very slow at first,and when I thought I could control it,I increased my speed.I rode faster and faster,as I thought I was a blade which can cut the wind.No one could stop me.
But the weather was bad.The rain came,while I played very happy regardless of the rain.I kept riding.Because I rode too fast,and the rain became heavy,I couldn't control my bike.
Actually,I fell down. But I felt very happy,cause I could
ride a bike!
All of my body got wet. So I had to go home.I was so
excited and forgot the pain I had got.
That's an unforgettable event in my memory.

I remember the first time I rode a bike.My mother bought me a
bike for my 5 years old birthday,It was a wonderful bike that I
had never seen before,and I still have it.
At that time,I r...

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I remember the first time I rode a bike.My mother bought me a
bike for my 5 years old birthday,It was a wonderful bike that I
had never seen before,and I still have it.
At that time,I really wanted to try it although I didn't know how to ride a bike, so I went to the square with my own
bike. When I got there, I began to ride my bike,I plaued
slowly at the beginning, and when I thought I can control it,I increased my speed.I rode faster and faster,I felt like I was a blade that can cut the wind. No one can stop me.
Unfortunatly, the weather was bad at that day.All of a sudden, it started to rain, but I played happily regardless of the rain.I kept riding.Because I rode too fast, the rain became heavy, and I had trouble controling my bike. Acturally,I fell off the bike. After all these, I still felt very happy that day.I learned how to ride a bike!
I got wet, and I didn't want to be sick the next day, so I had to go home.I was so excited and forgot the pain I had.That's one of the most unforgettable event in my memory.

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