可以帮我看一下这一篇英语习作吗?可以是错误与建议,A SEAT One day,I went out.I was standing on a bus .I was not felling well.The bus was crowded with lots of people and very hot.My leg ached because of standing.I don't like the su

可以帮我看一下这一篇英语习作吗?可以是错误与建议,A SEAT One day,I went out.I was standing on a bus .I was not felling well.The bus was crowded with lots of people and very hot.My leg ached because of standing.I don't like the su
可以帮我看一下这一篇英语习作吗?可以是错误与建议,
A SEAT One day,I went out.I was standing on a bus .I was not felling well.The bus was crowded with lots of people and very hot.My leg ached because of standing.I don't like the sultry weather .But there were many people stand just like me.Young men,young women and teenagers.However,there are always young people stading.The bus stopped,a old woman got on the bus.She had short white hair and leant upon a stick.A young man said"Madam,"and he left his seat at once"Come here,There is a..."Suddenly a woman of middle age sit on the young man's seat.
The young man was very angry"oh,how can you do this,lady?This seat not for you!"
“Well,why I can't sit this seat?It's not yours!”
Young man's face became red.
The old woman said"Oh,child,It's nothing...'”She was smiling.
A woman near the young man stoop up,said"Oh,Madam,you can sit my seat."And she looked at the woman of middle age
The matter was finally settled.I don't think I like that woman,and I think most people don't like her too.

可以帮我看一下这一篇英语习作吗?可以是错误与建议,A SEAT One day,I went out.I was standing on a bus .I was not felling well.The bus was crowded with lots of people and very hot.My leg ached because of standing.I don't like the su
主语不一致with lots of people and very hot
This seat not for you应该加is吧
The old woman said"Oh,child,It's nothing...'”She was smiling.最好是：she said with smile
Young man's face became red.His face turned red
most people改为most of the people

谁也帮不了你，能帮你的只有你自己想学好一们语言首先一定要愿意去学 是写出高质量的英语习作的必要条件。列提纲时不必过于详细，可以根据题目

你写得非常棒。。主要讲了让位的故事，最后一段你写你讨厌那个女人？最好多一些你自己的看法。。里面有些单词你可能写错了，也许是你打错在电脑上了。。不错不错！写得还可以吧。The old woman said"Oh,child,It's nothing...'”She was smiling.最好是：she said with smile 望采纳...

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你写得非常棒。。主要讲了让位的故事，最后一段你写你讨厌那个女人？最好多一些你自己的看法。。里面有些单词你可能写错了，也许是你打错在电脑上了。。不错不错！写得还可以吧。

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