麻烦给这篇英文小日记挑错误Talk with TimiShe is from Hungary.I know nothing about Hungary even where it is.So I found some articles about it from the Microsoft Student 2006 and see its map.Is a very small country,i know its geographical p

麻烦给这篇英文小日记挑错误Talk with TimiShe is from Hungary.I know nothing about Hungary even where it is.So I found some articles about it from the Microsoft Student 2006 and see its map.Is a very small country,i know its geographical p
麻烦给这篇英文小日记挑错误
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She is from Hungary.I know nothing about Hungary even where it is.So I found some articles about it from the Microsoft Student 2006 and see its map.Is a very small country,i know its geographical position from the map.Its too fay away from China.Compair with China it seems inappreciable.I tell her about my city,the population and the area and show her some pictures.My city ShanTou have the population of 4,680,000 and the area of 2064 sq.km.She said it's a big city.I told her BeiJing is much more large than ShanTou.But to my surprise,she didn't know BeiJing,the capital of China!I told her something about BeiJing and I said the 2008 Olympic Games will hold in China and we all proud of it.Then she said Budapest would like to hold the 2012 Olympic Games,but they know,the country has no money for it,but their parliament don't take care of it.It seems she don't like their parliament.And from her words i know the Hungary didn't do a good job and the people are dissatisfied.I feel happy that we living in China.
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麻烦给这篇英文小日记挑错误Talk with TimiShe is from Hungary.I know nothing about Hungary even where it is.So I found some articles about it from the Microsoft Student 2006 and see its map.Is a very small country,i know its geographical p
She is from Hungary. Since I know nothing about Hungary even where it is , I went to look for some articles about it. From the Microsoft Student 2006 I found its map. It is really a quite small country. I also made clear its geographical location from this map. It`s so faraway from China. Compared with China, it seems rather inappreciable. I tell her about the city I live in ,such as the population and the customs. In addition, I shew her some pictures of it. The population of ShanTou is 4,680,000 and its size is 2064 sq.km. She said that it was a big city. But I told her that BeiJing is much larger than ShanTou in size. Much to my surprise, she didn't even know BeiJing at all, the capital of China! Then I told her something about BeiJing and the exciting news that the 2008 Olympic Games would be held in it. Both of us were very proud of it. Then she said Budapest would probably hold the 2012 Olympic Games. However, the country has big financial problem. Moreover, their parliament don't pay much attention to it. She seemed not to like their parliament in some aspects. From her words, I knew that Hungary didn't make an effort and the dissatisfaction of its nationals . I felt pretty lucky to live in China.
楼主,日记应该有固定格式的,别忘记在最上方写下日期和天气哦.
你还是能够较清楚表达自己的意思,但由于词汇及语法上的束缚,还有待提高.建议有空多背背词汇手册,多看看原版小说之类的,但要选择适合你自己的.
努力吧,MAY YOU SUCCEED!

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She is from Hungary. I know nothing about Hungary, even where it is. So I searched and read some articles about the country via the Internet,including the map of it. I discovered that it is a very small country and saw its geographical position on the map. It's very fay away from China. Compared with China ,it seems inappreciable.
I told her about my city,its population and landscape and showed her some pictures.My city ShanTou has a population of 4,68 million and an area of 2064 sq.km. She said it's a big city. I told her BeiJing is much larger than ShanTou. But to my surprise,she didn't know BeiJing,the capital of China!! I told her something about BeiJing and said the 2008 Olympic Games will be held in China and we Chinese are all proud of it. Then she said Budapest had intended to host the 2012 Olympic Games, but they know, the country has no money for it, and their parliament even didn't make any effort. It seems she doesn't like their parliament.And from her words i know the Hungary isn't developing fast and the people are dissatisfied. I feel happy that we live in China and have made great achievements.

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She is from Hungary. I know nothing about Hungary even where it is. So I found(句子前后使用一般现在时，这时也该使用一般现在时，find) some articles about it from the Microsoft Student 2006 and see its map. Is (Is 开头的句子是疑问句，so...

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She is from Hungary. I know nothing about Hungary even where it is. So I found(句子前后使用一般现在时，这时也该使用一般现在时，find) some articles about it from the Microsoft Student 2006 and see its map. Is (Is 开头的句子是疑问句，so,it is 才是正确）a very small country,i know its geographical（ geographic）position from（on) the map. Its (It's)too fay away from China. Compair(Compairing句子开头是名词＼动名词＼人称代词，动词开头是祈使句）) with China （，）it seems inappreciable. I tell her about my city,the population ，and （删去，是连接最后一项的，这里后面还有一项）the area and(加then) show her some pictures.My city ShanTou have(has) the population of 4,680,000 and the area of(删of,用is) 2064 sq.km. She said it's a big city. I told her(that,tell sb. that..) BeiJing is much more large than ShanTou (BeiJing is larger than ShanTou). But to my surprise,she didn't know BeiJing,the capital of China!!(英语中不可能出现两个！）（So) I told her something about BeiJing and I said the 2008 Olympic Games will hold(be held) in China and（删去，是连接最后一项的，这里后面还有一项）. we all proud of it. Then she said Budapest would like to hold the 2012 Olympic Games, but they know, the country(can't affort for it) has no money for it, but (and)their parliament don't(doesn't care about it) take care of it. It seems she don't(doesn't) like their (her)parliament.And from her words i know the Hungary didn't do a good job and the people are dissatisfied. I feel happy that we living in China.
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