求英语高手帮我看一下这篇作文哪里有错!Happy Spring Festival!What did you think of the Spring Festival?I think it made me very tired,but very happy and excited!In China,married women and men will give lucky money to children in spring

求英语高手帮我看一下这篇作文哪里有错!Happy Spring Festival!What did you think of the Spring Festival?I think it made me very tired,but very happy and excited!In China,married women and men will give lucky money to children in spring
求英语高手帮我看一下这篇作文哪里有错!
Happy Spring Festival!What did you think of the Spring Festival?I think it made me very tired,but very happy and excited!In China,married women and men will give lucky money to children in spring festival.So after Spring Festival,a lot of children will have much lucky money.And this time is the wealthiest time about me of the year!But this money how to use in good way?现在我会告诉你我是怎样用的（这句我不知道怎样译,）At first ,I will give back 30%money to my parents,becausr they use a lot of money in the Spring Festival,even if the money is not a lot.Secondly,my mother will hekp me keep 30% money in the bank.Thirdly I will use the rest of money to buy some useful book or something about study.Time flyes,we must go to school after several days.I hope my study this term will better and better
Happy Spring Festival!What do you think of the Festival?I think it makes me feel very tired,but at the same time I am happy and excited.In china,married women and men will give luckly money to children in Spring Festival.So after the Festival a lot of children will have lots of luckly money.This time of year is the wealthiest time for me.But how to use it in a good way And now I will tell you that I how to use。Firstly I'll give back 30% of it to my parents because they spend a lot in the Spring Festival,so I'd like to help them out even it means little to them.Secondly,my mother will help me by putting another 30% in my savings account.Thirdly,I will use the rest of it to buy some useful books or other things about study.Time flies and we must go back to school in a few days.I hope my study this term would be better and better！

求英语高手帮我看一下这篇作文哪里有错!Happy Spring Festival!What did you think of the Spring Festival?I think it made me very tired,but very happy and excited!In China,married women and men will give lucky money to children in spring
问题多时间紧,直接改了.尽量保持题主的写作思路和风格,只改动语法和部分修辞.
Happy Spring Festival!What do you think of the Festival?I think it makes me feel very tired,but at the same time am happy and excited.In china,married couple will give money to children as fortune money in Spring Festival.So after the Festival a lot of children will have lots of fortune money.This time of year is the wealthiest time for me.But how to spend it if you ask me,and here's how.Firstly I'll give back 30% of it to my parents for they usually spend a lot during this time of the year,so I'd like to help them out even it means little to them.Secondly,my mother will help me by putting another 30% in my savings account.Thirdly,I will use the rest of it to buy some useful books or other things related to study.Time flies and we must go back to school in a few days.I hope my study this term would be better and better.

• I think it 【makes】 me very tired

• but  【is】 very  happy and excited!

• But 【these】money how to use in good way

• 现在我会告诉你我是怎样用的【And now I will tell you that I how to use】

  暂时只找到这些了。。。

1exciting
2in a good way
3now i will tell you how i use it.
4becausr they used a lot of money in the Spring Festival
5even if the money wasn't much.
6how time flies,时光飞逝
7we...

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1exciting
2in a good way
3now i will tell you how i use it.
4becausr they used a lot of money in the Spring Festival
5even if the money wasn't much.
6how time flies,时光飞逝
7we must go to school in several days.
8studying.study当名词讲是书房的意思。
And this time is the wealthiest time about me of the year!你这句话的意思是“这是我这一年中最富有的一段时间。”吗？ 我翻译为
and this time will become the richest period for me in a year.

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你好！很乐意为你解决你的问题！
第一行：What----How
第二行：married women and men---couple
第三行：So---Therefore；a lot of children will have much lucky money---children will have a lot of money；time---period
第四行...

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你好！很乐意为你解决你的问题！
第一行：What----How
第二行：married women and men---couple
第三行：So---Therefore；a lot of children will have much lucky money---children will have a lot of money；time---period
第四行：about---for；But this money how to use in good way---How to use this money in a good way；Now I will tell you how to use that money
第五行：give back---return；becausr---because
第六行：if（不需）；hekp---help
第七行：keep---to save；book---books
第八行：about---use for
第九行：will---will become
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