帮忙修改下这篇英语文章 我在高中的第一天我与我的父母走进硕大的校园看见一个个包含幸福的笑脸.我们都很高兴,因为这里的一切都很新鲜.我们都在学找班级和宿舍.我在宿舍里见到了以

帮忙修改下这篇英语文章 我在高中的第一天我与我的父母走进硕大的校园看见一个个包含幸福的笑脸.我们都很高兴,因为这里的一切都很新鲜.我们都在学找班级和宿舍.我在宿舍里见到了以
帮忙修改下这篇英语文章 我在高中的第一天
我与我的父母走进硕大的校园看见一个个包含幸福的笑脸.我们都很高兴,因为这里的一切都很新鲜.我们都在学找班级和宿舍.我在宿舍里见到了以后将会朝夕相处的室友,我们相互介绍着自己.最后,我们相伴到教室,与将与我奋斗三年的同学见面.接着,进入紧张的高中生活.
I and my parents went into huge campus saw a contains happy smiling face.We are all very happy,because everything here is very fresh.We are learning to find the class and the dormitory.I see in the dormitory after will elbow roommate,we introduce each other.Finally,we accompanied to the classroom,and will struggle with me three years of students meet.Then,into the strain of high school life.

帮忙修改下这篇英语文章 我在高中的第一天我与我的父母走进硕大的校园看见一个个包含幸福的笑脸.我们都很高兴,因为这里的一切都很新鲜.我们都在学找班级和宿舍.我在宿舍里见到了以
楼主 你错的很多诶...楼上的貌似也恐怕误人子弟了..这是参考文章
My parents and me(作宾语 绝对要用me的..) went into huge campus,seeing happy smiling face(用分词形式表示简便 contain在这儿多余了 看到一张张笑脸直接用seeing happy smiling face就够了 而不需要用“包括高兴的微笑的脸”contain省去).We are all very happy,because everything here is very fresh.We are learning(建议用一般现在时 而不是进行时 即(we learn to ...) to find the class and the dormitory.I see my roommate and make an introductionin to each other who will stay with me for 3years of studying period.(这段我直接自己写了 看不大懂你的某些造句..) Finally,we accompany each other to go to the class.(accompany sb.to do sth.)and step into the strain of high school life formally.(正是进入高中生活 step into 表示踏进 进入)

我也不能保证全对 按句子
1、I and my parents went into huge campus saw a happy smiling face.
My parents and I came into the huge school and saw a great many happy smiling faces.
我要放在后面 英语里人称顺序是：二 三 一 ...

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我也不能保证全对 按句子
1、I and my parents went into huge campus saw a happy smiling face.
My parents and I came into the huge school and saw a great many happy smiling faces.
我要放在后面 英语里人称顺序是：二 三 一 （you he and I）
campus多指大学校园 不过应该也可以用的 一个个就不用翻成contains 了 它的意思是连续的
2、We are all very happy, because everything here is very fresh.
We were all very happy because everything here is very novel.
时态要与前面一致 because前面可以不加逗号 fresh一般用来形容食物新鲜
3、We are learning to find the class and the dormitory.
为什么用learn？我没看懂
4、I see in the dormitory after will elbow roommate, we introduce each other.
I saw my roommate that I need to stay with everyday in the dormitory and we introduced ourselves.
5、Finally, we accompanied to the classroom, and will struggle with me three years of students meet.
At last, we went to the classroom together to meet the classmates that will study with me in the next 3 years.
6、Then, into the strain of high school life.
After that was the intensive life in the high school.

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