求检查下英语语法有无错误　　Respected professors, good morning. I am very glad to be here for this interview.　　My name is XXX, 23 years old. I come from Tianjin Binhai New Area. I have finished my undergraduate education in Tianjin

求检查下英语语法有无错误　　Respected professors, good morning. I am very glad to be here for this interview.　　My name is XXX, 23 years old. I come from Tianjin Binhai New Area. I have finished my undergraduate education in Tianjin
求检查下英语语法有无错误
　　Respected professors, good morning. I am very glad to be here for this interview.
　　My name is XXX, 23 years old. I come from Tianjin Binhai New Area. I have finished my undergraduate education in Tianjin Polytechnic University and major in Finance.
　　I am responsible, easy to adapt, compatible with my friends, and willing to help others. In spare time I like to watch movies, it can relax myself, even some movies can inspire people's will. And also I like communicating with friends, but most of the time, I'd love to listen to their experience, every time I feel that I can learn something.
　　Although I have broad interests in many aspects and grasp the essential knowledge of the major, but I think at present, I can do many things in a superficial level, but not be competent to do things professionally owing to lack of ample knowledge and ability. So I think further study is still urgent for me to realize self-value.
　　The major that I hope pursue for my further education is Insurance .because I find insurance is playing a more and more important role in our modern society. And nowadays in China, with the rapid economical development may provide a lot of chances to us.
　　OK, that's all. Thank you very much.
帮忙检查下语法 还有这么演讲是否合适 有没有什么需要改进的地方 求教

求检查下英语语法有无错误　　Respected professors, good morning. I am very glad to be here for this interview.　　My name is XXX, 23 years old. I come from Tianjin Binhai New Area. I have finished my undergraduate education in Tianjin
嗯,文章写得事实性很强,也很质朴,但是若作为一篇演讲稿,则显得有些平庸,缺乏一些个人魅力...我不是专业评委,故不好说,也没有权利做过多的评论,如果仅仅当做一名普通听众来说,我想,第三段稍微改一下会更吸引我,可以简单地介绍一下自己的兴趣爱好,就如你文中所说：I like watching movies and communicating with friends--that's OK!在这之后,可以减去一些陈述性的评价和讨论,而改为讲述你的经历和故事——大家容易和演讲者所讲的生活经历产生共鸣.你可以说：I watched ---- a few days before,and I was really moved by----;I find that----,It was really an unforgetable experience.For this reason, here,I 'm glad to recomend it to you,and I promise you can gain something special in your heart as well.此后,介绍你喜爱交往时,也可以想办法更加亲近于听众,you can say:In my eyes, i see every friend of mine as someone I respect and learn from.Courage,confidence,kindness,and so on,I learnt from their words and their unique personality.I 'm hoping to get along with you and learn from you soon!等等,或许这些改动能让你和观众的交流增强!祝你成功!

in ……，because it can relax me,(句子间要有连词，relax后不+反身代词)
although 不能与but同时用，两个but 都不需要
economic development
建议演讲就是让别人简单的听明白你的意思，所以断句要合理安排，太冗长了，没人会听的，自己也累的上。大体上你的文笔还OK，句法你要多注意了~~...

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in ……，because it can relax me,(句子间要有连词，relax后不+反身代词)
although 不能与but同时用，两个but 都不需要
economic development
建议演讲就是让别人简单的听明白你的意思，所以断句要合理安排，太冗长了，没人会听的，自己也累的上。大体上你的文笔还OK，句法你要多注意了~~

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结尾Thank you very much换成Thanks for listening更好