求英语作文改错As is vividly betrayed in the chart above,the number of MS/MA candidates in the year of 2003 was 750 thousand,then the number reached 950 thousand in 2004,and rocketed to 1.3 million in 2005.People may wonder what is behind the f

求英语作文改错As is vividly betrayed in the chart above,the number of MS/MA candidates in the year of 2003 was 750 thousand,then the number reached 950 thousand in 2004,and rocketed to 1.3 million in 2005.People may wonder what is behind the f
求英语作文改错
As is vividly betrayed in the chart above,the number of MS/MA candidates in the year of 2003 was 750 thousand,then the number reached 950 thousand in 2004,and rocketed to 1.3 million in 2005.People may wonder what is behind the figure.
The reasons for the increase which is clearly revealed in the chart above can be illustrated as follows.To begin with,as a rusult of college expansion plan,there are a lager number of college graduates,but the career opportunities are as many as before,so lots of graduates take part in the entrance exams for postgraduate schools to evade the fierce competition.What’s more,at present,we are living in an age of knowledge economy,we must have enough knowledge to survive in the society,knowledge learning has become a life-long work,Therefore,more and more people are unsatisfactory with their four-year college education and apply for MA/MS degree.all in all,above-mentioned factors led to the great increase of MA/MS candidates.

求英语作文改错As is vividly betrayed in the chart above,the number of MS/MA candidates in the year of 2003 was 750 thousand,then the number reached 950 thousand in 2004,and rocketed to 1.3 million in 2005.People may wonder what is behind the f
中国式英文.好样的,你我有缘,我帮你改改吧.
As that betraying in the chart above vividly,the numbers of MS/MA candiate in the year 2003 was 750 thousands.And then the numbers were reached in 950 thousand in 2004 and were rocked to 1.3 millions in 2005.However,people might wonder what that behind the figure was.
The reansons for the increasing which is pretty revealed in the chart above,it can be illustrated as follows.At the beginning of this,the college expansion's result is that there are a huge numbers of college graduation,but the opportunities on career were as many as before,so there are many graduates take part in the entrance exams for postgraduate school to evade the fierce competition.Moreover,we are under the age of economic knowledge that we must have enough knowledge to survive ourselves.Knowledge was become a life-long work.Therefore,there are more and more people unquality for their 4 years college degree and some might want to apply for MA/MS.In conclusion ,I urge I mention all in above that there are the great increasing of MA/MS candidates.
兄弟,你这个论文,短文吧,我才疏学浅,学艺不精哈,你这知识性的社会经济形态让学子们很难接受.因为社会现在变了,学子们跟不上.需要吸取更多的知识才能丰富自己.
奉献你一句,你这论点还可以,不过语法没改之前,老外可能看不懂吧,就这样,祝你好运吧.