大家帮忙修改英语作文Jenny’s DayThis is Jenny. Last Friday, She gets up at 6:30. She has breakfast at 7:00. She goes to school at 7:30. She has lunch at 11:30. She goes home at 3:30. She has dinner at 6:00. She does homework at 7:00.大家

大家帮忙修改英语作文Jenny’s DayThis is Jenny. Last Friday, She gets up at 6:30. She has breakfast at 7:00. She goes to school at 7:30. She has lunch at 11:30. She goes home at 3:30. She has dinner at 6:00. She does homework at 7:00.大家
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Jenny’s Day
This is Jenny. Last Friday, She gets up at 6:30. She has breakfast at 7:00. She goes to school at 7:30. She has lunch at 11:30. She goes home at 3:30. She has dinner at 6:00. She does homework at 7:00.
大家看看有没有语法的错误,如果没有,就帮我加上个结尾,THANKS!
为什么老师给我们的提示是:This is Jenny. She gets....
提示是这样啊,说清楚吧,我怕被老师骂,
题目如下:
八,下面是JENNY上星期五的时间安排表.请你写一段话描述她那天做了什么.字数不少于25个单词
三单不是GETS吗?第三人称加单数形式
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大家帮忙修改英语作文Jenny’s DayThis is Jenny. Last Friday, She gets up at 6:30. She has breakfast at 7:00. She goes to school at 7:30. She has lunch at 11:30. She goes home at 3:30. She has dinner at 6:00. She does homework at 7:00.大家
时态全部用错了 应该用一般过去时 而你全都用的是一般现在时

如果那是老师的提示，那你可能误会你老师了，他是让你写Jenny习惯性每天都做的事情，让你练习三单的使用方法，而不是日记，而你使用三单没有问题，只是作文有少许问题，如句子连贯性不够，和时间表达有问题。修改如下：
Jenny’s Day
This is Jenny. She gets up at 6:30 and has breakfast at 7:00am. Then she g...

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如果那是老师的提示，那你可能误会你老师了，他是让你写Jenny习惯性每天都做的事情，让你练习三单的使用方法，而不是日记，而你使用三单没有问题，只是作文有少许问题，如句子连贯性不够，和时间表达有问题。修改如下：
Jenny’s Day
This is Jenny. She gets up at 6:30 and has breakfast at 7:00am. Then she goes to school at 7:30am and several hours later, she has lunch at 11:30am. She goes home at 3:30pm. After having dinner at 6:00pm, she does homework at 7:00pm. and several hours later, she goes to bed at 10:00pm. What a busy day!
日记的时态都要用过去时，因为日记都是记载都是过去发生的事情，三单使用正确的，但是不适合日记。got it？
修改如下：
Jenny’s Day
This is Jenny. Last Friday, She got up at 6:30 and had breakfast at 7:00am. Then she went to school at 7:30am and several hours later, she has lunch at 11:30am. While she finished her today's school life, she went home at 3:30pm. After having dinner at 6:00pm, she did homework at 7:00pm. and several hours later, she went to bed at 10:00pm. What a busy day!
小学水平，继续努力！
注意以下几个问题：
1、时间，你用的是12小时制，所以要用am和pm来显示上下午时间，am是上午，pm是下午。
2.注意时态
3.注意句与句之间加些连词，使文章有连贯性，看起来是整体，这一点非常重要！

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Jenny's one day
This is Jenny. Last Friday,she got up at 6:30,she had breakfast at 7:00,she went to school at 7:30,she had lunch at 11:30,she went home at 3:30,she had dinner at 6:00,she did homework at 7:00
she went to bed at 9:00
This is jenny's one day.

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也可以把 Last Friday 改为每天everyday.
你说三单，就是一般现在时！

Jenny’s Day
This is Jenny. Last Friday, She got up at 6:30 and had breakfast at 7:00am. Then she went to school at 7:30am and several hours later, she has lunch at 11:30am. While she finished her...

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Jenny’s Day
This is Jenny. Last Friday, She got up at 6:30 and had breakfast at 7:00am. Then she went to school at 7:30am and several hours later, she has lunch at 11:30am. While she finished her today's school life, she went home at 3:30pm. After having dinner at 6:00pm, she did homework at 7:00pm. and several hours later, she went to bed at 10:00pm. What a busy day!

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