帮我评价一下下面的短文.I was go to the fiml on yesterday.I'm waited for the bus.It takes me about 10 minutes.The bus was comed.I'm get on the bus.I saw a old woman get on the bus.I give a seat for her.the old woman said"Thank you""That's a

帮我评价一下下面的短文.I was go to the fiml on yesterday.I'm waited for the bus.It takes me about 10 minutes.The bus was comed.I'm get on the bus.I saw a old woman get on the bus.I give a seat for her.the old woman said"Thank you""That's a
帮我评价一下下面的短文.
I was go to the fiml on yesterday.I'm waited for the bus.It takes me about 10 minutes.The bus was comed.I'm get on the bus.I saw a old woman get on the bus.I give a seat for her.the old woman said"Thank you""That's all right"I said.About 12 minutes,I'm get off the bus.I wave goodbye to the woman.I'm glad to give the old a seat.I was into the fiml.

帮我评价一下下面的短文.I was go to the fiml on yesterday.I'm waited for the bus.It takes me about 10 minutes.The bus was comed.I'm get on the bus.I saw a old woman get on the bus.I give a seat for her.the old woman said"Thank you""That's a
i went to the film yesterday.it took me 10 minutes to wait for the bus.after i got on the bus,i saw an old woman aboard the bus.i offerd my seat to her.she smiled and said "Thank you"to me.i answerd "that's all right." about 12 minutes later,i got off.i waved my hands and said "goodbye" to the old lady.i was so glad that i can help others.then i went to the film.
was 属于be 动词,不能和go这个实义动词一起用.
yesterday 前面不用加on
事情发生在过去,全文都要用过去式
it take or took sb sometime to do sth
the bus was comed 的意思是汽车被来到
让座是offer one's seat to sb或者是give up one's seat to sb.
一定要注重时态!
祝你英语越学越好^^

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首先客观评价的话..这篇短文几乎每一句都有问题..而且语法紊乱..时态混杂..还兼有一些单词错误..
但是从全文看来..条理明晰..也完全可以看出您此文要表达的意思..
帮您简单修改如下：
I was going to see a film yesterday.it took me about 10 minutes to wait for the bus....

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楼主好~
首先客观评价的话..这篇短文几乎每一句都有问题..而且语法紊乱..时态混杂..还兼有一些单词错误..
但是从全文看来..条理明晰..也完全可以看出您此文要表达的意思..
帮您简单修改如下：
I was going to see a film yesterday.it took me about 10 minutes to wait for the bus.I got on the bus and saw an old woman get on the bus too.I gave up my seat for her.The old woman said"Thank you","You are welcome."I said.After about 12 minutes,I got off the bus and waved goodbye to the old woman.I was glad to help the old woman.then I went to the film.
您可以仔细对比一下..
祝您进步~

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