求修改作文,顺便打分,公共场所吸烟现象曾随处可见.由此带来的问题.禁止在公共场所吸烟的意义.Most Chinese man are smoke,no matter they are working,chatting or waitting.Now most people have realized the harm of smoke

求修改作文,顺便打分,公共场所吸烟现象曾随处可见.由此带来的问题.禁止在公共场所吸烟的意义.Most Chinese man are smoke,no matter they are working,chatting or waitting.Now most people have realized the harm of smoke
求修改作文,顺便打分,
公共场所吸烟现象曾随处可见.由此带来的问题.禁止在公共场所吸烟的意义.
Most Chinese man are smoke,no matter they are working,chatting or waitting.Now most people have realized the harm of smoke,most of them have gave up smoke,but we could see some people smoking in public places before now wherever we went to.
Smoking in public places ,causing a series of problems.Firstly,that will make the people around you feel bored.Secondly,smoking in public places make the environment worse.In order to not affect others and pollute the environment ,you had better not to smoking in public places.
What is the meaning of ban smoking in public places?In my view,firstly,this is an effection way to reduce the number of smoking people.Secondly,it can keep others' not be affected.Thirdly,it can protect the environment not be pollute.So I agree to ban smoking in public places

求修改作文,顺便打分,公共场所吸烟现象曾随处可见.由此带来的问题.禁止在公共场所吸烟的意义.Most Chinese man are smoke,no matter they are working,chatting or waitting.Now most people have realized the harm of smoke
Most Chinese man smoke,no matter whenthey are working,chatting or waitting. Now most people have realized the harm of smoke,and most of them have gave up smoke,but we can see some people smoking in public places where we go to.
Smoking in public places ,causes a series of problems.Firstly,it will make the people around you feel unhappy.Secondly,it makes the environment worse.In order not to affect others and to have the environment polluted ,you had better not smoke in public places.
What is the meaning of banning smoking in public places? In my view,firstly,this is an effective way to reduce the number of smoking people. Secondly,it can keep others not be affected.Thirdly,it can protect the environment from being polluted.So I agree to ban smoking in public places
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同意 jason_azhe1999 。第一个逗号改成句号比较好吧，But we could 中的could改成can会更好吧。 can protect the environment from being pollute。把pollute, 改成polluted。

Most Chinese men smoke,no matter when they are working,chatting or waiting. Now many people have realized the harm of smoking,most of whom have given up smoking. But we could still see people smoking ...

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Most Chinese men smoke,no matter when they are working,chatting or waiting. Now many people have realized the harm of smoking,most of whom have given up smoking. But we could still see people smoking in public places that we go to.
Smoking in public places causes a series of problems.Firstly,it will make the people around you feel bored.Secondly,smoking in public places makes the environment worse.In order not to affect others and pollute the environment ,you had better not smoke in public places.
What is the importance of baning smoking in public places? In my view,firstly,this is an effective way to reduce the number of smoking people. Secondly,it can keep others from being affected.Thirdly,it can protect the environment from being pollute.So I agree to ban smoking in public places.
第一段内容的表述顺序似乎有点问题。还有似乎缺少了禁止公共场所吸烟的措施和手段。
简单打个分的话11分吧。

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