帮我看一下下面这段话有没有语法错误When I get to the America,firstly I’ll say “Hello my name is Sam,I’m from China.It’s nice to meet you.”.If he/she asks me my age,I’ll say ”I’m a 13-year-old boy.”If he/she asks me m

帮我看一下下面这段话有没有语法错误When I get to the America,firstly I’ll say “Hello my name is Sam,I’m from China.It’s nice to meet you.”.If he/she asks me my age,I’ll say ”I’m a 13-year-old boy.”If he/she asks me m
帮我看一下下面这段话有没有语法错误
When I get to the America,firstly I’ll say “Hello my name is Sam,I’m from China.It’s nice to meet you.”.
If he/she asks me my age,I’ll say ”I’m a 13-year-old boy.”
If he/she asks me my hobby,I’ll say “I sometimes play the piano,but I think I can't play it very well,and I practice writing with a china brush four or five times a week,too”
If he/she don’t know the CHINA BRUSH,just tell them it’s a very old writing tools,Chinese people used it 2000 to 1000 years ago,and we write the words on a Rice paper.
If he/she don’t know the RICE PAPER just tell them Rice paper originated in the Tang Dynasty and the feature of the RICE PAPER is soft,fountain ink and durability.It made of a kind of tree,but I don’t know the name of it.

帮我看一下下面这段话有没有语法错误When I get to the America,firstly I’ll say “Hello my name is Sam,I’m from China.It’s nice to meet you.”.If he/she asks me my age,I’ll say ”I’m a 13-year-old boy.”If he/she asks me m
1.文字输入,请在英文标点后加空格再继续输入才是符合规范的.
2.你这是一篇作文么?America 前不用加 The 了,因为就只有一个美国,不用特指了.
第一段的I’ll say…,没有交代是对谁说,感觉很奇怪.
3.If he/she asked…这里用被动语态来表达会更好,避免了he/she 的不确定性【用 they 也不错~】,还能说得更清楚,因为这里的重点是我.可以改成：When asked about my hobbies,I will anwser,……
4.还有第二个 China brush 前也不用加 The.just tell them……这里的主语 I 不应该省略掉.用 I will ……会更好.the words 前不加 The ,不是特指某个词语,所以也不用加.
5.“just tell them Rice paper originated in the Tang Dynasty” paper 后加 is .
“is soft,fountain ink and durability” 这里除了柔软,后面两个词应该改成形容词性.soft,XX and durable.墨水会晕开没时间帮你查啦,你百度下~
it made 之间加 is .

有好几处- -。你自己看看，过去式没变，还有ask貌似不+s

When I get(came) to the America, firstly I’ll say “Hello(,) my name is Sam,(.)I’m from China. It’s nice to meet you.”.
If he/she asks me my age, I’ll say ”I’m a 13-year-old boy.”
If he/she ask...

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When I get(came) to the America, firstly I’ll say “Hello(,) my name is Sam,(.)I’m from China. It’s nice to meet you.”.
If he/she asks me my age, I’ll say ”I’m a 13-year-old boy.”
If he/she asks me my hobby, I’ll say “I sometimes play the piano,but I think I can't play it very well, and I practice writing with a china brush(chinese brush) four or five times a week, too”
If he/she don’t know the CHINA BRUSH, just tell them it’s a very old writing tools(tool), Chinese people used it 2000 to 1000 years ago, and we write(wrote) the words on a Rice paper.
If he/she don’t know the RICE PAPER just tell them Rice paper originated in the(删除) Tang Dynasty and the feature(s) of the RICE PAPER is soft, fountain ink and durability. (这三个feature要词性一样)It made of a kind of tree, but I don’t know the name of it.

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