请帮我改一下这篇英语作文是练习写的考研作文,题目是一张图画,图画的上半部分是刚发名汽车的时候,人们认为有了汽车什么地方都能去.图画的下半部分是是现在堵车的画面.希望能重点帮

请帮我改一下这篇英语作文是练习写的考研作文,题目是一张图画,图画的上半部分是刚发名汽车的时候,人们认为有了汽车什么地方都能去.图画的下半部分是是现在堵车的画面.希望能重点帮
请帮我改一下这篇英语作文
是练习写的考研作文,题目是一张图画,图画的上半部分是刚发名汽车的时候,人们认为有了汽车什么地方都能去.图画的下半部分是是现在堵车的画面.
希望能重点帮我找找语法方面的问题.比如"cars played a role which .",“more and more people like a comfortable way of living ”这几句有点拿不准,还有在公共汽车上应该用“in”还是“on”我也记不清了.这样的问题希望能多留意一些.
另外最后一段的大部分我是背的范文,应该没什么问题.
As is depicted in the picture ,in the old times ,cars played a role which could make it easy people to go to everywhere ,on the contrary ,nowadays ,large numbers of the automobile have brought some serious problems to us ,bbecause more and more people are willing to have their own cars.
It is abundantly clear that the artist is purposfully reminding us of a rather negative phenomenon emerging in today's society .In fact ,traffic jams are not uncommon nowadays .The issue is attributed to three factors.In the first place ,with the development of the economy ,many people are very busy ,they are usually on a business trip ,driving acar makes it convenient .In the second place ,more and more people like a comfortable way of living .Sitting in a car is obviously more comfortable than standing in a bus .In the third place ,some people believe that having a car is the symbol of wealth and success.
From my perspective ,we should take some effective mersures to solve the problem of trafic jams .The first step shoud be to fundamentally change lifestyles so that the car is no longer part and parcel of everydaylife .governments also need to apply attractive measures to draw citizens to adopt means of public transportation.

请帮我改一下这篇英语作文是练习写的考研作文,题目是一张图画,图画的上半部分是刚发名汽车的时候,人们认为有了汽车什么地方都能去.图画的下半部分是是现在堵车的画面.希望能重点帮
第一行role前加important或者major,因为要强调cars的重要性嘛,这样说起来太麻烦了,我直接给你打上修改过的吧.麻烦你自己对照一下.
As is depicted in the picture, in the old days ,cars played an important role which made it easy for people to reach anywhere they wanted. However, the sudden spring of the automobile also brings serious problems. More and more people are willing to buy their own cars.这是第一段,改动不多.第二段的第四行,把逗号,就是"忙碌'和"他们"之间的那个换成and.trip 后可以为句号了.convenient 可以用比较级,家一个more,第五行那个句子改为,more and more people prefer a much more comfortable way of living.

高中的英文水平~~~~~