谁帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有什么错误,有错帮忙说下正确句子.Dear Zhang Jing:Hello!I know tomorrow is your birthday .I hope you will have a wonderful birthday .But I’m so sorry I can’t come to your birthday party .Because

谁帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有什么错误,有错帮忙说下正确句子.Dear Zhang Jing:Hello!I know tomorrow is your birthday .I hope you will have a wonderful birthday .But I’m so sorry I can’t come to your birthday party .Because
谁帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有什么错误,有错帮忙说下正确句子.
Dear Zhang Jing:
Hello!
I know tomorrow is your birthday .I hope you will have a wonderful birthday .But I’m so sorry I can’t come to your birthday party .Because in these days ,I’m very busy.
In the morning ,I usually get up very early ,at about 8 o’clock .Then ,at about 8:40 ,I have to go to the Children’s Palace to learn physics .The lessons begin at 9’00 .After the class ,it ‘s 10’40 .Then I should go home to do my homework .It used me half past one hours .
In the afternoon ,I have to clean my house and do much housework .That always makes me feel so tired .And I can watch TV for one hour .At 4:00p.m.,I always go to my neighbour’s house to look after their child ,Liu Yulin .The child is only 3 years old .He is so naughty ,so it’s vvery hard to look after him.
At night ,I can play computer and watch TV ,but it’s only for 2 hours .And I have also to go to bed early ,at about 10:30.
My vacation is too busy ,so I don’t have any time,to come to your birthday party ,sorry .But I also brought a gift for you .What’s that?OK ,I will let your friend Xue Ting to take it to you.
At last ,I also say “ Happy birthday to you!”.
Yours ,
Wendy

谁帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有什么错误,有错帮忙说下正确句子.Dear Zhang Jing:Hello!I know tomorrow is your birthday .I hope you will have a wonderful birthday .But I’m so sorry I can’t come to your birthday party .Because
Dear Zhang Jing:
Hello!
I know tomorrow is your birthday .I hope you will have a wonderful birthday .
(Since tomorrow is your birthday ,I hope you will have a wonderful day.)
(But去掉） I’m so sorry I can’t come （go）to your birthday party .Because（,because）I’m very busy (in )these days.
In the morning ,I usually get up (very early ,）at about 8 o’clock .I have to go to the Children’s Palace to learn physics at 8:40 .The lessons begin at 9’00 .After the class ,it ‘s 10’40 .Then I should go home and spend half an hour on my homework .In the afternoon ,I have to clean my house and do much housework .That always makes me feel so tired .And I can watch TV for one hour .At 4:00p.m.,I always go to my neighbour’s house to look after their child ,Liu Yulin .He is only 3 years old .He is very naughty ,so it’s vvery hard to look after him.
At night ,I can play computer and watch TV ,but it’s only for 2 hours .And I also have to go to bed early ,at about 10:30.
My vacation is too busy ,so I don’t have any time to come to your birthday party ,sorry .(But）Yet I still havea gift for you .What’s that?OK ,I will let your friend Xue Ting （to去掉） take it to you.
At last ,（I also say “） Happy birthday to you!（”）.
Yours ,
Wendy
大致改了,有的直接改,没括出来
建议,so also then but very have to没必要用那么多
不要那么多逗号,把句子连起来,说话简洁点
LZ年纪应该不大,写成这样不错了