帮我看看这篇文章有没有离题!主题为“学好英语,迎大运”,如果有,请告诉我怎样修改Greet the Unverisaide with good EnglishHello everyone!I am glad to be here to share my views with you!I am from Class 3,Grade 6,Cuibei Pri

帮我看看这篇文章有没有离题!主题为“学好英语,迎大运”,如果有,请告诉我怎样修改Greet the Unverisaide with good EnglishHello everyone!I am glad to be here to share my views with you!I am from Class 3,Grade 6,Cuibei Pri
帮我看看这篇文章有没有离题!主题为“学好英语,迎大运”,如果有,请告诉我怎样修改
Greet the Unverisaide with good English
Hello everyone!I am glad to be here to share my views with you!I am from Class 3,Grade 6,Cuibei Primary School.I have a lot of hobbies .I always have excellent scores.I think learning English well help us to be good volunteers.So if a foreign tourist ask me some questions,I can easily help him .It also can let the foreigners think our Chinese are friendly and warm.
Mention English,I have many words to say.Although my English was not too bad at first,my English was also not too excellent.Then I try to do better.I practice every day and do more exercise.Soon my English was greatly improve,I gradual['ɡrædjuəl] began to pride.However I realized that this is not good,so I practised English much harder.And now,my English is top-notch.
As a Shenzhen citizen,if we can learn English well,we can introduce our city and country to foreigners well.For example ,we can tell them more about our histroy and culture .So that they can know us better.Remember to use polite words:"please" "hello" "thank you" "sorry" and "good-bye” and so on.
Let us greet the Unverisaide with the good English!

帮我看看这篇文章有没有离题!主题为“学好英语,迎大运”,如果有,请告诉我怎样修改Greet the Unverisaide with good EnglishHello everyone!I am glad to be here to share my views with you!I am from Class 3,Grade 6,Cuibei Pri
I think learning English well help us to be good volunteers. (help 要加s）
Although my English was not too bad at first, my English was also not too excellent. （换成so good)
你好像挺喜欢有excellent
Soon my English was greatly improve(被动要improved)
I gradual['ɡrædjuəl] began to pride
histroy(history)
Let us (let's)Let us 和let's 意思不一样let's 才有呼吁让别人和我们一起的意思
小学生能写成这样已经很好了,不过我觉得的确有一点离题,中间那一段好像和题目没什么关系