帮忙看下小弟的英语作文,不足之处请指出,I don't know what I want ,or what is my life target,and I don't know I was what kind of man .I always think ,maybe almost people ask themselves,what I want ,what I need ,and then ,what I gonna d

帮忙看下小弟的英语作文,不足之处请指出,I don't know what I want ,or what is my life target,and I don't know I was what kind of man .I always think ,maybe almost people ask themselves,what I want ,what I need ,and then ,what I gonna d
帮忙看下小弟的英语作文,不足之处请指出,
I don't know what I want ,or what is my life target,and I don't know I was what kind
of man .
I always think ,maybe almost people ask themselves,what I want ,what I need ,
and then ,what I gonna do,perhaps just enjoy this process.
Some people need friend ,or money ,power,sex etc.The key is do you have a
dream,its noble or vulgar.What ever,it belongs to you.
What are you suppose to do,to get more and faster what you want,of course,
under your principle.Don't care about what others think of you.
ugly,fat,false loftiness,selfish,arrogance,hypocrisy,all the bad words to describe
you.Remember this,different people think you are not the same.
Remeber your dream ,then to make it come ture.The key is to enjoy this process.
中文意思大概就是,我不知道我想要什么,或者我的生活目标是什么,又或者我到底是个什么人.
我一直这样想,大多数人会问自己,我想要什么,得到之后又怎样,可能只是在享受这个过程.
一些人需要朋友,一些人需要钱,权利,美色等等,重要的是有没有梦想,是高尚或者低俗,无论怎样,那是属于你的.
你该怎样去做才能更多更快的得到你想要的,当然,在你的原则允许以内,不用在乎别人怎么看待你.
丑陋,肥胖,假清高,自私,自大,虚伪,所有的不好的词语来形容你,记住这个,不同的人眼中有不同的你,
记住你的梦想,然后实现它,关键是去享受这个过程

帮忙看下小弟的英语作文,不足之处请指出,I don't know what I want ,or what is my life target,and I don't know I was what kind of man .I always think ,maybe almost people ask themselves,what I want ,what I need ,and then ,what I gonna d
有几处用词不当、语法标点小错误.已改正.
I don't know what I want ,or what is my life target.And I don't know what kind of person I am .
I think many people maybe ask themselves that “what I want”,“what do I need”.And then ,what I want to do perhaps just enjoy this process.
Some people need friend ,money ,power ,sex etc.The key is whether you ever had a dream.Its noble or vulgar.Whatever,it belongs to you.
What are you suppose to do to get what you want more and to be faster.Of course,it's depends on your principle.Don't care about what others thinking about you——ugly,fat,false loftiness,selfish,arrogance,hypocrisy,all the bad words to describe
you.Remember that the others think you are unique.
Remeber your dream ,then to make it come ture.The key is to enjoy this process.
【建议可以再斟酌一下用词,比如“丑陋”一般不直接用ugly,而用not goodlooking,“肥胖”——overweight】

很好

总体行不行，得看你所应处的英语水平，但是有语法错误:开头的宾语从句应为陈述句，what my life target is。还有几处类似，自己找找。另外写这种哲理类的文章，词汇很重要，这点你做的还行，如果之间的联系更为流畅就好了。

直接在你原文上改了o,结合翻译:
I don't know what I want ,or what my life target is,even,I don't know what kind of person I am.
I always think that people almostly may ask themselves,what I want ,what I n...

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直接在你原文上改了o,结合翻译:
I don't know what I want ,or what my life target is,even,I don't know what kind of person I am.
I always think that people almostly may ask themselves,what I want ,what I need ,
and what I gonna do,perhaps they just enjoy this process.

Some people need friends ,or money , power,sex etc. The key is you do(表强调) have a dream, its noble or vulgar. What ever,it's belongs to you.

What is you suppose ,to get what you want more and faster, of course,
under your principle. Don't care about what others think of you.
ugly, fat,false loftiness,selfish,arrogance,hypocrisy,all the bad words to describe
you.Remember this,different people have different idea of you.

Remeber your dream , then to make it come ture. The key is to enjoy this process.

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