谁帮我改下英文作文语法错误when I arrived at Singapore I only used 2 months for study English,then I could play and talk with my friends.My family influence me a lot,I learn self-composed ,steady,discretion for my dad,learn kindly,goodnes

谁帮我改下英文作文语法错误when I arrived at Singapore I only used 2 months for study English,then I could play and talk with my friends.My family influence me a lot,I learn self-composed ,steady,discretion for my dad,learn kindly,goodnes
谁帮我改下英文作文语法错误
when I arrived at Singapore I only used 2 months for study English,then I could play and talk with my friends.My family influence me a lot,I learn self-composed ,steady,discretion for my dad,learn kindly,goodness,optimistic,from my mom.And that is just a Tip Of The Iceberg.I would like to go abroad to America because I think it’s more interesting study at there,choose subject that I like,don’t need to spend precious time to learn things that no use in future.Don’t have to take lot’s exam because they pay attention to practice more then theoretic.Socialization,application skills,leadership and comprehensive is so importance for the society and must what i need to blend in the society so that’s what I know I can learn in a college of United States,so I think traverse the college in America is necessary road to succeed.America’s economy is on the top all over the word,they pay attention to education.What they dive into Harvard is as same as how much United Kingdom Government dive into all high school in England.Also the United States is a freedom,democracy,and with an adequate legal system country it can give me a larger stage to grow up.Go study abroad can mutation my philosophy,world view,know more about the word.It will be a great experience and change to my life.I’m a vivacious motor type guy,at part time; I use to go for some sports with my friend,almost all kind of sport I can play well,but like basketball best of all.about the specialty,I would like to study Human Resource Management,years ago my dad bring me a book of that,after I finished it,I decide to study this specialty,because I’m so interesting in it.This specialty use modern scientific method to make a company’s resource rational distributed.

谁帮我改下英文作文语法错误when I arrived at Singapore I only used 2 months for study English,then I could play and talk with my friends.My family influence me a lot,I learn self-composed ,steady,discretion for my dad,learn kindly,goodnes
部分评注
第一处：when I arrived at Singapore I only used 2 months for study English,
——for 是介词,后面不能跟动词原形 study,有三种改法：
* for English study （study 变成名词）
* for studying English （用动名词）
* to study English （用不定式）
第二处：I learn self-composed, steady, discretion for my dad, learn kindly, goodness, optimistic, from my mom.
——此句错误较多
* for my dad 应该是 from my dad,
* learn 后不能用形容词 self-composed, steady 作宾语,改为：learn self-composedness, steadiness and discretion （三个名词并列）
* learn kindly, goodness, optimistic 错误同上,改为 learn kindliness, goodness, optimism,

第三处：I think it’s more interesting study at there, choose subject that I like, don’t need to spend precious time to learn things that no use in future.
——有以下几处错误
* at there：there 是副词,可以直接用来表示“在那里”,去掉介词 at
* 整个句子不符合“think it + 形容词 + 不定式”句型,改为：I think it more interesting to study there, choose subject that I like and not to need to spend precious time …(三个并列不定式短语)
第四处：Don’t have to take lot’s exam because they pay attention to practice more then theoretic.
——有几处错误
* lot’s exam 改为 lots of exams
* more then theoretic改为 more than theory
* Don’t have to take lots of exams 是祈使句,意思是“不必要参加许多考试”,大概是想表达“我不必要参加大量考试”,改为 I don’t have to take lots of exams
第五处：Socialization, application skills, leadership and comprehensive is so importance for the society and must what I need to blend in the society so that’s what I know I can learn in a college of United States, so I think traverse the college in America is necessary road to succeed.
——这是个长句,有下列错误
* Socialization, application skills, leadership and comprehensive 中最后一个词汇 comprehensive 是形容词,不能与前面的名词并列,改为 comprehension
* Socialization, application skills, leadership and comprehension 是并列的四个主语,属于复数,is 应该改为 are
* importance 是名词,改为形容词 important 作表语
* must what I need to…中情态动词 must后没有动词,另外主语离得太远,应该再次重复,改为 they must be what I need to …
* so that’s：单数的that 不能指代Socialization, application skills, leadership and comprehension
* necessary road to succeed 中 succeed 是形容词,改为名词 a necessary road to success,
* traverse 在这里是动词,改为非不定式to traverse 或者动名词 traversing
* I think to traverse the college in America is a necessary road to success 改为书面语 I think it a necessary road to success to traverse the college in America
第六处：What they dive into Harvard is as same as how much United Kingdom Government dive into all high school in England.
——错误如下
* What they dive into Harvard 改为 What they dive in Harvard
* as same as 改为 the same as
* 整个句子意思不清,改为： What they dive in Harvard is the same as what United Kingdom Government does in all high school in England. 意思是“美国在哈佛大学所深入研究的与英国政府在英格兰所有高中所做的一样”
修改后的文段如下：
when I arrived at Singapore I only used 2 months for studying English, then I could play and talk with my friends. My family influence me a lot. I learn self-composedness, steadiness and discretion from my dad, and learn kindliness, goodness, optimism from my mom. I think it more interesting to study there, choose subject that I like and not to need to spend precious time to learn things that no use in future. I Don’t have to take lots of exams because they pay attention to practice more then theory. Socialization, application skills, leadership and comprehension are so important for the society and they must be what I need to blend in the society. They are what I know which I can learn in a college of United States, so I think it a necessary road to success to traverse the college in America. America’s economy is on the top all over the word, they pay attention to education. What they dive in Harvard is the same as what United Kingdom Government does in all high school in England.
以下部分因错误太多,只做了修改而没有评注：
The United States is a country of freedom and democracy, and they have an adequate legal system which can give me a larger stage to grow up. Go study abroad can influence my philosophy, world view, know more about the world. It will be a great experience and change to my life. I’m a vivacious motor type guy; at part time, I often go for some sports with my friend, and almost all kinds of sports I can play well, the best of all is to play basketball. For my specialty, I would like to study Human Resource Management. Years ago, my dad brought me a book of that, and after I have finished it, I decide to study this specialty, because I’m so interesting in it. This specialty use modern scientific method to make a company’s resource rational distributed.

In the end of school year, I have been read a very good book 以下是我所发现的语法错误（仅仅指出了语法错误而已），有何问题互相交流交流

arrive at = 用于小地方，比如车站，机场, 村庄。
arrive in = 大地方 = 国家，城市等。
LZ可以学着自己给自己改作文：一篇东西写完后，放在一边，1、2天后再回来检查，你会发现比“当场检查”多得多的问题，尤其是那些根本不该犯的基本错误。

1. studyiing
错误很多，改不起