帮我修改一下英语作文.尤其是纠正一下错的语法.根据英语提示词语写一篇英语作文.写一篇意思连贯符合逻辑的小故事.要求.所给词都用上.运用第三人称.合理运用一般过去时和过去进行时.

帮我修改一下英语作文.尤其是纠正一下错的语法.根据英语提示词语写一篇英语作文.写一篇意思连贯符合逻辑的小故事.要求.所给词都用上.运用第三人称.合理运用一般过去时和过去进行时.
帮我修改一下英语作文.尤其是纠正一下错的语法.
根据英语提示词语写一篇英语作文.写一篇意思连贯符合逻辑的小故事.要求.所给词都用上.运用第三人称.合理运用一般过去时和过去进行时.关键词：a bright sunny day;ride the bike;park;take some books outside;sit on the grass; beside;so...that...;to one's surprise;find;missing;follow;a monkey.
It was a bright sunny day.I rode my bike to the park.I took soom books outside and sat on the grass.While I was reading carefully,two kids were talking loudly beside me.They were so noisy that I can't read anymore."Please speak softly." I put down my books and speaked to them.But they just looked at me and laughed.I looked down.To my surprise,I found my books missing.Then these two kids ran to the Center Park.I followed them and I found my books were undera tree,near the lake.A monkey was playing with them.Then I threw a stone to the monkey,it ran away.I picked up my books and got back home.What a terrible day!

帮我修改一下英语作文.尤其是纠正一下错的语法.根据英语提示词语写一篇英语作文.写一篇意思连贯符合逻辑的小故事.要求.所给词都用上.运用第三人称.合理运用一般过去时和过去进行时.
[原文改错]
1.soom 拼写错误 应为some；
2.拼写不规范,建议将speaked改为spoke；
【作文评析】
正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用；请注意词汇表达的多样性及拼写错误,尤其加强学术词汇的使用；层次欠清晰,衔接成分很少.
【例文】
It was a bright,sunny day.I rode my bike to the park.I took some books outside and sat on the grass.While I was reading carefully,two kids beside me were talking loudly.They were so noisy that I can't read anymore."Please speak softly," I put down my books and speaked to them.But they just looked at me and laughed.I looked down.To my surprise,I found my books missing.Then these two kids ran to the Center Park.I followed them and I found my books were under a tree,near the lake.A monkey was playing with them.Then I quickly threw a stone to the monkey,and it ran away.I picked up my books and eventually got back home.What a terrible day!
这是我用批改网给你改的,怎么样?

some 一些，你拼错了