求翻译大师帮我修改作文错误这是我写的一篇IELTS的作文,题目就是说：现在的人们都喜欢重复做一些事情,但是有些人认为,改变一下现状或许会更不错,讨论两边的优缺点. 请高手们帮我纠正

求翻译大师帮我修改作文错误这是我写的一篇IELTS的作文,题目就是说：现在的人们都喜欢重复做一些事情,但是有些人认为,改变一下现状或许会更不错,讨论两边的优缺点. 请高手们帮我纠正
求翻译大师帮我修改作文错误
这是我写的一篇IELTS的作文,题目就是说：现在的人们都喜欢重复做一些事情,但是有些人认为,改变一下现状或许会更不错,讨论两边的优缺点. 请高手们帮我纠正一下,并阐述我的主要问题在哪里,我会感激不尽的.
The majority of people would like to do the things which they always do, little by little, it will become one of people’s habits, but, however whiles others claim that experience fresh things could be a better way of living, therefore, a heated debate has been ignited about should people whether try to accept new things or not.
In one hand, people continue doing the same thing could have an array of merits. Initially, people might save a plenty of time from doing intimate things. Moreover, people feel confident to do the things which they always do; therefore, people may receive a satisfactory work report and make people to stay in a positive mood, which is beneficial for people’s health. In a word, keep doing the same things are acceptable and feasible.
In the other hand, repeat doing the same things might contain some drawbacks. In the first place, people may feel bored from the same schedule. In the second place, keep doing the same things may limit people’s technical area, working area or relationships area(人际圈?) , so it is not beneficial for people’s horizon or career. In the third place, if compare with changing their habits on what people usually do, repeat doing the same things are lack of creativity and imagination. In brief, attempt new things could bring a lot of new feelings and chances in all aspects.
In conclusion, taking all factors into account, I personally hold the view that people should try new things, but people have to consider what is got to be changed and what is not got to be changed. Beneficial habits that people should always keep it.

求翻译大师帮我修改作文错误这是我写的一篇IELTS的作文,题目就是说：现在的人们都喜欢重复做一些事情,但是有些人认为,改变一下现状或许会更不错,讨论两边的优缺点. 请高手们帮我纠正
Most people like to do the things which they always do.Little by little,it will become one of their habits.However,others claim that experiencing fresh things might be a better way of living.Therefore,a heated debate has been ignited on this issue.
1.would like 有一点客气
2.but 和 however 一样的意思不要重复,however 用在句子开头,but 用来把句子连接起来
3.experience 在这里应该用 -ing form 不懂怎么解释
4.你有一个毛病,就是句子不会中断,英文叫 run-off sentences
On one hand,to continue doing the same things can have an array of merits.People can save plenty of time doing things they are familiar with.Moreover,people feel confident to do the things they always do.Hence,they will receive a satisfactory work report and stay in a positive mood,which is beneficial to their health.In brief,to keep doing the same things is acceptable.
1."On one hand...On the other hand" 是 on 不是 in
2.不要一直 "people" "people" 的,可以用 "they"
3.不知道有没有 "in a word" 这种 conjunctions
On the other hand,repeating the same actions can have some drawbacks.Firstly,people may feel bored by the same schedule.Additionally,it may limit their technical area,fields of work and social circle.Henceforth,it has an adverse impact on their career.Besides,in contrast to changing habits,repeating the same actions lacks creativity and innovation.In short,attempting new things can bring new feelings and opportunities in other aspects.
1."in the first place" 不是“第一”的意思,是“本来”的意思
2."in the second place" - 没有这种表达法
In conclusion,taking all factors into account,I feel that people should try new things,but they need to consider what has to be changed and what should not be changed.Habits which are beneficial should be kept.
1."I" 就是 "personally"
2."what's gotta be changed" 是口语
3.你很喜欢加很多不需要的字
P.S.不要一直people