帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有什么错误,顺便评一下分,An unforgettable trip I had an unforgettable trip.I went to The Happy Vally with my friend in summer vacation.It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway.We were surp

帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有什么错误,顺便评一下分,An unforgettable trip I had an unforgettable trip.I went to The Happy Vally with my friend in summer vacation.It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway.We were surp
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An unforgettable trip
I had an unforgettable trip.I went to The Happy Vally with my friend in summer vacation.It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway.We were surprised,because The Happy Vally was very huge and there were many interesting things in it.Such as Roller Coaster、Bumper Car、Pirate Boat.So we played many events.After that,we went to the restaurant and ate some delicious food.We stayed in The Happy Vally for six hours and we left there at 7 p.m..How great and unforgettable the trip is!

帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有什么错误,顺便评一下分,An unforgettable trip I had an unforgettable trip.I went to The Happy Vally with my friend in summer vacation.It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway.We were surp
An unforgettable trip
I had an unforgettable trip.I went to The Happy Vally with my friends this summer vacation.It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway.We were surprised,because The Happy Vally was very huge and there were many interesting things in it,such as Roller Coaster、Bumper Car、Pirate Boat.And we played many events.After that,we went to the restaurant and ate some delicious food.We stayed in The Happy Vally for six hours and we left there at 7 p.m..How great and unforgettable the trip is!
1、语法问题：朋友 应用复数形式
因为 和 所以 不能连用
2、输入问题：在打英语时,标点符号后面是要空一格再打字的.
3、打分：6分 基本意思都能表达清楚,语法错误不多.但是语义在表达上面不够流畅自然,强加因果关系.建议注意连词的运用.

1. I went to The Happy Vally with my “friends” in summer vacation
2.We were surprised, because The Happy Vally was very huge and there were many interesting things .

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An unforgettable trip
I had an unforgettable trip.I went to Happy Vally with my friend in summer vacation.It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway.We were s...

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An unforgettable trip
I had an unforgettable trip.I went to Happy Vally with my friend in summer vacation.It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway.We were surprised, because Happy Vally was very huge and there were many interesting things in it.Such as Roller Coaster, Bumper Car, Pirate Boat.So we played many events.After that, we went to the restaurant and ate some delicious food.We stayed in The Happy Vally for six hours and we left there at 7 p.m..How great and unforgettable the trip is!

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An unforgettable trip
I had an unforgettable trip. I went to The Happy Vally with my friends this summer vacation. It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway. We were surprised, bec...

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An unforgettable trip
I had an unforgettable trip. I went to The Happy Vally with my friends this summer vacation. It only took us thirty minutes to arrive there by subway. We were surprised, because The Happy Vally was very huge and there were many interesting things in it, such as Roller Coaster、Bumper Car、Pirate Boat. And we played many events.After that,we went to the restaurant and ate some delicious food.We stayed in The Happy Vally for six hours and we left there at 7 p.m..How great and unforgettable the trip is！

1、语法问题：朋友 应用复数形式
因为 和 所以 不能连用
2、输入问题：在打英语时， 标点符号后面是要空一格再打字的。
3、打分：6分 基本意思都能表达清楚，语法错误不多。但是语义在表达上面不够流畅自然，强加因果关系。建议注意连词的运用。

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