麻烦看下这篇文章哪些地方有语法错误 At first,let me introduce myself.My name is jack,I’m 24 years old.I was born in shanghai.Shanghai is a very modern city.I love Shanghai ,but the traffic is so terrible in shanghai .Today,I will te

麻烦看下这篇文章哪些地方有语法错误 At first,let me introduce myself.My name is jack,I’m 24 years old.I was born in shanghai.Shanghai is a very modern city.I love Shanghai ,but the traffic is so terrible in shanghai .Today,I will te
麻烦看下这篇文章哪些地方有语法错误
At first,let me introduce myself.My name is jack,I’m 24 years old.I was born in shanghai.Shanghai is a very modern city.I love Shanghai ,but the traffic is so terrible in shanghai .Today,I will tell you a story,a story about myself.When I was five years old,I went to the kindergarten,I like kindergarden very much because I can play over there and it was a happy time,but happyiness is always short.Then,I went to the elementary school.I didn’t like study .it’s so hard for me .i lost my playing time and freedom..I didn’t know why I was study.When I was in the middle school,my English teacher always criticize me,and she always say:boy,knowledge is power.You don’t dream away your time.you must be study hard..I couldn't understand her at that time.but now i realize,i am so sorry to my english teacher.She is a about 40 years old woman.she is very kind,i will never forget her.Last year,I made a big decision.I decide to carry my school bag and go to school again..I want to change my life,allthough my base of english is nothing,but now,i will do my best to imporve my English,i want to improve my english ability.So i think I have to make a english study plan.at first ,i will reading english ,because i am not good at reading and often make mistakes when writing English.then,I will try my best to remember more words.And I will speak English as much as possible.i believe i can realize my dream through these learning plans.i want to make friends with all of the people of here.At last,I want to say ,This story is mostly written by myself ,There must be many grammer mistakes in it..But I think ,I should tell this story on my way because the story about myself.

麻烦看下这篇文章哪些地方有语法错误 At first,let me introduce myself.My name is jack,I’m 24 years old.I was born in shanghai.Shanghai is a very modern city.I love Shanghai ,but the traffic is so terrible in shanghai .Today,I will te
帮你改了一点,如下.写得不错,加油啊
First, let me introduce myself. My name is jack, I'm 24 years old. I was born in shanghai. Shanghai is a very modern city. I love Shanghai, but the traffic there is terrible. Today, I will tell you a story, a story about myself. When I was five years old, I went to the kindergarten. I liked kindergarden very much because I could play there and it was a happy time. But happiness is always short. Then, I went to the elementary school. I didn’t like studying. It's too hard for me. It stole my playing time and freedom. I didn't know why I studied. When I was in the middle school, my English teacher always criticized me, and she always said: "Boy, knowledge is power. You don't dream away your time. you must study hard." I couldn't understand her at that time. But now I realize what she said is true. I feel so sorry to my English teacher. She was a woman about 40 years old then. She was very kind and I will never forget her. Last year, I made a big decision. I decided to carry my school bag and go to school again. I want to change my life, although my English foundation is nothing, but now, I will do my best to imporve it, and I want to improve my English ability. So I think I have to make an English study plan. First, I will read English articles, because I am not good at reading and often make mistakes when writing English. Then, I will try my best to learn more words by heart. And I will speak English as much as possible. I believe I can realize my dream through these learning plans. I want to make friends with all of the people here. At last,I want to say, this story is mostly written by myself. There must be many grammar mistakes in it. But I think, I should tell this story my way because the story is about myself.

very modern city city用metropolis替换，意思是大都市，very可以去掉了。
because I can play 这里不是过去是吗？ 用could
I didn’t know why I was study was得改成现在时态, am
而且句法不对， 不知道你的意思是不是要说，我不知道我为什么要学习？
用I did not k...

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very modern city city用metropolis替换，意思是大都市，very可以去掉了。
because I can play 这里不是过去是吗？ 用could
I didn’t know why I was study was得改成现在时态, am
而且句法不对， 不知道你的意思是不是要说，我不知道我为什么要学习？
用I did not know why do I need to study
she always say: 过去的话只能用过去时, said
you must be study hard ， be去掉
你的分数只值这些，下面不看了，要全部看完，50分，很多句子不地道，要修改成地道的句法200分。要的话给我发百度消息。

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