14年10月18日雅思大作文,求评分及理由,It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about the culture of other people.We can learn as much as from books,films and internet.to what extent do you agree or disagree?作文如下：Wh

14年10月18日雅思大作文,求评分及理由,It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about the culture of other people.We can learn as much as from books,films and internet.to what extent do you agree or disagree?作文如下：Wh
14年10月18日雅思大作文,求评分及理由,
It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about the culture of other people.We can learn as much as from books,films and internet.to what extent do you agree or disagree?
作文如下：
While I agree that much information about other cultures can be gained from books,movies and on-line resources,I think travelling is still necessary for us to understand other cultures and enhance our cultural awareness.
It is true that we can learn much about other cultures from books,films and internet resources.For example,travelling guide books are among the best sellers at many bookstores.Some movie documentaries also provide detailed information about different cultures in different parts of the world.We can also gain much information from on-line travelling websites about the local culture in our travelling destination.These resources are better accessible to most people.
However,vicarious experience gained from books,films or the internet cannot replace travelling and experiencing other cultures first-hand.For example,one important element of culture is diet.Without trying the local cuisine,we would lose an important portion of culture.Moreover,face-to face communication plays an essential role in facilitating understanding of different cultures.It is often suggested that visitors should visit the local community and try to make friends with the local people.They should also try to learn some basic local language to improve communication with the local people.Another advantage of travelling is that it provides us with many opportunities to participate in the cultural activities in the local place,for example,joining the wedding party in a village or playing games and sports with local people.Culture is an important element of social practice and it must be performed in person rather than by imagination.
In conclusion,I admit that books,films and internet resources are helpful for people to learn about other cultures,but still they are only beneficial supplement and not competent substitute for traveling if we really want to gain deeper understandings about other cultures.

14年10月18日雅思大作文,求评分及理由,It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about the culture of other people.We can learn as much as from books,films and internet.to what extent do you agree or disagree?作文如下：Wh
我觉得首段和尾段观点很清晰,每段句首的中心句的使用也不错,+
论证：第二段,一般,表达上其实没什么问题,但是你只不过分项说了不同渠道可以给提供信息,其实还不如整合了一起讲,然后谈谈是哪些信息.如：
There is no doubt that much can be learned about various cultures from books,TV programs and websites nowadays that provide detailed information about local customs,architectures,food,arts and sports .
第三段中心句的表达应做一些变化了,而不是一直重复books,films,internet.(这跟第二段几乎一样）.论证上虽然算有层次,但感觉力度一般,而且次序可以调整一下以体现力度.比如直接接触和交流再加上实地观察可以放第一个比详论之,之后再论其他点.
如：However,the second-hand experience obtained from reading books or watching TV can never be the same as what one sees and experiences in person..
由于时间关系无法展开太多.不过看得出来你的英语功底是在的,语法及拼写错误算挺少的.在有限的时间里能写到以上的那些点也已经不错了.
综上,我预测你的写作分数不出意外的话会是：6-6.5,如果大方点可看到7,严厉点的话5.5也是有可能.不过5.5的话,可能问题是在于你的词汇量的点缀不够漂亮（因为高频句型你用得很明显）以及论证地不够力度.不过考官审稿的时间也不长,除非非常老练否则也不见得那么仔细.所以预计是6-6.5最后.