我写的On Excessive Packaging有没有语法错误,写得好不好,我估计有点烂,文章整体有没有需要改正的On Excessive PackagingMany goods package themselves excessively today.These products catch people’s eyes by theirs colorful

我写的On Excessive Packaging有没有语法错误,写得好不好,我估计有点烂,文章整体有没有需要改正的On Excessive PackagingMany goods package themselves excessively today.These products catch people’s eyes by theirs colorful
我写的On Excessive Packaging有没有语法错误,写得好不好,我估计有点烂,文章整体有没有需要改正的
On Excessive Packaging
Many goods package themselves excessively today.These products catch people’s eyes by theirs colorful appearance.
Nowadays,more and more competitive between producers.
They only focus on theirs package.They made the bottle with tempt colors and special styles to attract customers to buy it.Obviously they made a mistake.They attach less importance to their product’s quality.I believe there are two reasons can explain this .Firstly,producer want sell better than the other company.Secondly,many customers believe that delicate the package is,the better quality will be.So they package theirs products excessively.
In my opinion,excessive packaging isn’t right.Excessive packaging will be a big disaster to our environment.Their packages can’t be degraded.We must protect our environment by ban laws to force producers to use environmental materials.Let people realize that beautiful package not equal good quality.

我写的On Excessive Packaging有没有语法错误,写得好不好,我估计有点烂,文章整体有没有需要改正的On Excessive PackagingMany goods package themselves excessively today.These products catch people’s eyes by theirs colorful
第二段competitive between producers. between可以不用,用在这里表示不可以理解
They attach less importance to their product’s quality
product’s 改为 products‘ 这里的产品应用复数 ,不可能只用一种产品吧

producer want sell better than the other company.
want sell 改为 want to sell want to do sth 固定搭配
the other company 改为 other companies 这里的公司应用复数.one... the other+单数 用于两个物体之间. one ...other +复数用于多数之间

第三段We must protect our environment by ban laws to force producers to use environmental materials.
materials 改为 material .material为不可数名词,不可用复数
Let people realize that beautiful package not equal good quality.
not 改为 doesn't be动词的否定才用not .equal为谓语动词,否定要加don't 或 doesn't.因为 beautiful package （没加s 默认为单数）单数用doesn't或者不可数也用doesn't.复数则用dont