请帮我看看这篇作文的语法错误点,我自己写的,大小写不用纠正.my low-carbon life now ,many people like low-carbon life,so do i .our earth is in trouble.we should help it but how to do it 、have some advice.first,i ofen go to sc

请帮我看看这篇作文的语法错误点,我自己写的,大小写不用纠正.my low-carbon life now ,many people like low-carbon life,so do i .our earth is in trouble.we should help it but how to do it 、have some advice.first,i ofen go to sc
请帮我看看这篇作文的语法错误点,我自己写的,大小写不用纠正.
my low-carbon life
now ,many people like low-carbon life,so do i .our earth is in trouble.we should help it but how to do it 、have some advice.
first,i ofen go to school on foot .it not only can Protect the environment,but also can get exercise.
second,if i leave the classroom or my house ,i will turn of the light ,the electric fan and the TV.
then,i will close the faucet when i don't use water .
next ,make full use of paper.
finally,i often use the Cloth Bag rather than plastic bag.
Protect the environment,is everybody's business.you should have low-carbon life as me.

请帮我看看这篇作文的语法错误点,我自己写的,大小写不用纠正.my low-carbon life now ,many people like low-carbon life,so do i .our earth is in trouble.we should help it but how to do it 、have some advice.first,i ofen go to sc
how to do it 、have some advice
句子不完整,
first,一般用firstly second一样
turn of 关上 为 turn off the lights 注意复数
make full use of paper 无主语
i often use the Cloth Bag rather than plastic bag
Cloth Bag 为何大写?i often use the cloth bags rather than the plastic bags
Protect the environment,is everybody's business.主语不完整 动词词组作主语应使用动名词形式 应改为 Protecting the environment is everybody's business.
you should have low-carbon life as me
as me 改为 as i do前一句动词为have,后一句应保持一致,用do表示

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我的低碳生活
现在，像低碳生活的许多人，所以我... ...我们的地球出现了问题。我们应该帮助他，但如何做到这一点，有一些建议。
首先，我奥芬步行去上学。它不仅可以保护环境，而且还可以得到锻炼。
第二，如果我离开教室或我家，我会变成光，电风扇和电视机。
然后，我将关闭水龙头时，我不使用水。
接下来，充分利用纸张。
最后，我经常使用的布袋，而不是塑料袋。
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