请英语好的朋友帮助修改一下英语作文,关于香港迪士尼Glocalization is one of the major problems for Disney in Hong Kong.Much effort has been put to promote as adaptation for Chinese labor practices.‘smile factory’ is a typical

请英语好的朋友帮助修改一下英语作文,关于香港迪士尼Glocalization is one of the major problems for Disney in Hong Kong.Much effort has been put to promote as adaptation for Chinese labor practices.‘smile factory’ is a typical
请英语好的朋友帮助修改一下英语作文,关于香港迪士尼
Glocalization is one of the major problems for Disney in Hong Kong.Much effort has been put to promote as adaptation for Chinese labor practices.‘smile factory’ is a typical example about this problem.Disney advertised itself as ‘happiest place on earth’ but people in Hong Kong think overly friendly is not a good action which caused negative feeling.
In another hand,‘Smile factory’ also cause ‘emotional labor’ problem which push employees hide their real feelings and display an unnatural surface.This made a negative relationship between inner feelings and outer expression.

请英语好的朋友帮助修改一下英语作文,关于香港迪士尼Glocalization is one of the major problems for Disney in Hong Kong.Much effort has been put to promote as adaptation for Chinese labor practices.‘smile factory’ is a typical
第一段你可以这样写：
Localization is one of the complications in Disneyland in Hong Kong.Much effort has been put into adaptation of the Chinese working cultures.Disneyland’s traditional strategy of “smile factory” reflects such problem.Disneyland advertises itself as the “Happiest Place on Earth” but Hong Kong people’s avoidance of “excessive friendliness” causes negative feelings among general public visitors.
第二段…我不想不用改了.我觉得第二段不能跟第一段互相映射,因为第一段说的是整间公司运作和对公众的负面影响,第二段说的只是员工个人层面,跟公司和大众没关系,有点脱离重点.除非你能说出员工个人的负面性能够怎样怎样影响公司或大众这个重点,否则两段是欠缺连系性,而且第二段的员工层面也未能给予开头的第一句支援.
还有,我想说的是,你上面所说的'smile factory‘其实不是一个problem吧?真正的probelm是“违背smile factory的做法”吧?所以,这句‘smile factory’ is a typical example about this problem.
有点词不达意.
另外,留意你这里应该用Disneyland,不是Disney,迪士尼和迪士尼乐园是不同的东西!（虽然我们中国人口头上常常用迪士尼就算)

think overly friendly 改为：think excessive friendly. 这样表述更地道。